Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment—doing things they like to do—rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is undeniable that people undergone living in a stressful and competitive world, and how they spend their limited time in a drastically changing world is a heated debate. While some people stand to reason that people spend more time working ever before, they think young people have no time to be relaxed, let alone doing what they like; others stand on the other side of this continuum and believe that life have been created to accomplish one main goal "happiness." Personally speaking, I strongly hold the idea that nowadays comparing to actions should be done, people prone to consider their very gratification as a main priority. The reasons to support my viewpoint are vindicated in the following paragraphs.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that everyone is aware that life is short, and awareness of death has been thoroughly affected every aspect of life. For more explanation, the consciousness of mortality promotes the idea of being nothing but happy and should enjoy life as it is possible. Influences by this worldview stimulates one to pursue joy and indulgence rather than those burdensome, compulsory stresses. Individuals look for something try to escape from meaningless and unworthy stresses. besides many people stigmatize those who take life too seriously and torturing themselves by working hard to gain more money at the expense of ignoring their joy and happiness. Even I think if something is hard, and personally, take life easy. As we can see assuming the life as a short and limited time which is not worth to passed with meaningless stresses makes people to always seek more pleasure and happiness.
The second equally significant reason which is worth mentioning is that with the genesis of technology people have more time for doing their favorite activities and also easily distracted from their mandatory duties. Travel, for example, comparing last century is very easy by using trains, planes and so on. Such possibilities could absolutely act as a motivator; in order to relieve experienced stress especially when that one overwhelmed by drudgery let alone going a travel, planning for it can be considered as a distraction from the work one should do. There is another instance of technology facilitate distraction, internet and social media bring recreation in our home, everyone has access to the internet and just by touching phone's screen and surfing on the net could provide so many joy to his/her tedious tasks. These examples illustrate that technology is a trigger for spending more and more time for doing something joyful, and this happen by providing facilitating equipment, saving time and distracting from important tasks.
To conclude, considering the above-mentioned reasons, people willing to do something they love rather than the works they have to do because they think life is short and it is unnecessary to enduring work stress, as well advancement of technology addicted people to do their wishes because it provides more time and distracting inventions like cell-phone and social media.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ir very gratification as a main priority The reasons to support my viewpoint are ...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun joy seems to be countable; consider using: 'many joys'.
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...and surfing on the net could provide so many joy to hisher tedious tasks These examples ...
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Suggestion: endure
... life is short and it is unnecessary to enduring work stress as well advancement of tech...
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...ventions like cellphone and social media
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, look, second, so, well, while, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2536.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 495.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12323232323 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80667503509 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515151515152 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 821.7 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 495.0 20.1344086022 2458% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2536.0 100.406767564 2526% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 495.0 20.6045352989 2402% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 82.0 5.45110844103 1504% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258541557711 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.258541557711 0.076458572812 338% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184635887105 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0982473476491 0.0645574589148 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 250.2 11.7677419355 2126% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -439.41 58.1214874552 -756% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 197.5 10.1575268817 1944% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.9 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 32.11 8.01818996416 400% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 10.002688172 560% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 200.0 10.0537634409 1989% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 56.0 10.247311828 546% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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