Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People who want to be sucessful need to know about several areas, but others focus on one skill.
In the contemporary world, people have been surrounded by a lot of new jobs and careeas, and they need to obtain new skills. So important is knowng about how to be succesful that it gives rise a controversial question as to whether people must obtain several skills or just focus on developing one skill. From my perspective, I adhere to the idea that nowadays people need to be well-informed in one area. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint through some noteworthy reasons.
The first aspect to point out is that the knowledge has been deeper in the past few dacades, and people need to try more to reach a appropriet level of the knowledge thay are learning. To shed ligh on why having a deeper knowledge affect people's succes, it is enough to indicate that those people wanting to learn several skills just obtain a small amount of the knowledge they pursuing to obtain. Hence, this canot gauranty them to be succesful in the modern science-based world. Moreover, one of the factors that shows who is really sucssesful is working in fanous comanies. Therefore, individuals working in these kinds of comany need to have achieved a deep knowledge to coporate in making new thechnologies for their companies. As it has been said, being skilfull in one are is more needed today, and had people tried to focus on one skill, they would be more sucessful today.
The next equally noteworthy reason that has to be mentioned here is that not only ca having a deep knowledge be beneficial in the modern era, but also it perevents individuals to learn severals unrelated skills. It is possible for any person to keep going in a way in which they cannot realize they are obtaining some unrealted skills. Consequently, at the end of this way they will waste a lot time and lose thier energy to come back and start from scratch. Besides, learnig several skills, people might forget some of them after a while, so focusing on one ability or skill won't whese kinds of problems. It is nessesary for people to be aware of passing time because thay may choose a wrong way of learning many skills.
In conclusion, I belive that people have to focous on one skill because nowadays copanies need people with deep knowledge to create new technologies.Also, it would be possible for people, having tried to gain different, to forgot some of their skills when don't use them for a long time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 219, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
... it gives rise a controversial question as to whether people must obtain several skills or ju...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...s, and people need to try more to reach a appropriet level of the knowledge thay ...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'deep knowledge'.
Suggestion: deep knowledge
...e kinds of comany need to have achieved a deep knowledge to coporate in making new thechnologies...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e aware of passing time because thay may choose a wrong way of learning many skil...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Also
...ep knowledge to create new technologies.Also, it would be possible for people, havin...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...nt, to forgot some of their skills when dont use them for a long time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, hence, if, may, moreover, really, so, therefore, well, while, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1985.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73747016706 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68491646736 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515513126492 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.8558993278 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0625 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1875 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6875 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272902280073 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0903335072824 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0721524851082 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177257536646 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543772957003 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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