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TPO 63

In the modern world, educational systems have been changed and governments need to change their old view about them. So effective is haveing a perfect educational system in making a developed counry that governments are trying to do their best to improve it. The conroversial question which arises here is that whether it is needed to spend much money on the education or not. As far as I am concerned, I believe that it would be an asset for a governmet to use its money to make a perfect educatiola systems. I elaborate on my reasons in the following paragraphs.

To begin with, according to scicologists the most important period therein children's charactristics can grow is the ages of five to ten years old. The believe that in these agese the children's talen should be detected to use their talent in the furure. Moreover, children in ages of five to ten could obtain the best social behaviors than they are older. Hence, if governments are not paying attention enough to them in these ages, it will be difficult or sometimes impossible to change their adverce scosial behaviors. Consecuently, governments have to advocate big budget on children to prevent them from losing their talents and gain negative scocial manners. As an example, In our country, the government always has invested less money on the education system for kindergarden or children schools. If the government had spent huge money to improve its educational system, our country would have been developed todays.

Second, it is obvious that today, in a develped country universities play a pivotal role and as a whole they are like an engine used to create new thechnologies. Watching any developed country, governments can realize the more they want to make the country wealthier, the more they need to invest on universities becasue in this way a lot of factories can be stablished. Hence, creating more jop opportunities and developing of the economy are just two simple results of this action. Besides, universities can provide indirectly the country with a lot of facilitoes such as hospitals, sport stadioums, and so on. Accordingly, the walfare and also, the level of the country's hygene, which are two symble of developed countries, could increass.

In conclution, I beleive that governments should invest much money on education system because it it is indispudable to finds out children's talents in the age of five to ten to protect them from devoting from right way. Also, universities are the key factor to make a country grat by making a great economy which universities are able to do it perfectly.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 148, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...w is the ages of five to ten years old. The believe that in these agese the childrens talen...
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Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
... the ages of five to ten years old. The believe that in these agese the childrens talen...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 96, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: it
... much money on education system because it it is indispudable to finds out childrens ...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, hence, if, moreover, second, so, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2164.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99769053118 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91789481667 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519630484988 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 689.4 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.761599052 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.894736842 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7894736842 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36842105263 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34474745424 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0967977137384 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101705335711 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197402589882 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0717953220311 0.0645574589148 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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