Making an important decision involves some factors such as the current emotional state of a person, social condition, previous experiences, level of maturity, etc. The majority of these factors are linked to the fact of listening to opinions from other people. Consequently, this can help to make the best choice about some topic. Then, in my opinion, people should not make important decisions alone. I feel this way for two reasons that I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, I think it is so important to listen to new points of view from other people when we need to make an important decision. This gives us a second opinion about something, and we are allowed to have more security to make a decision. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. My brother was thinking of moving to a new home, away from her family. He asked me for some advice concerning that decision. I said that if he moves out, probably he can be unsafe since there is anyone that knows him. He told me that he wanted privacy and independence. Therefore, I said that he can obtain all these things, but at the same time he can live near our family. So, in any emergency case we are always ready to assist him. Then, if my brother did not talk with me, maybe he made a bad decision.
Furthermore,people might feel under pressure when they are making a significant decision alone. For instance, my sister was thinking of getting a divorce from her husband. She said that they had been fighting for a couple of days and she had not been able to think clearly. She consulted with me and my parents. We gave her consolation, helped her amend her ties with her husband and today she has a thriving family of her own. In stark contrast, if she had made her decisions on her own, today she might not have been elated.
In conclusion, I reassert my view that a person must never make important decisions alone. I concur, that there is no ideal answer regarding this issue. However, I feel that a new perspective, the stress of making a decision alone, and the disadvantage of being a novice in the matter at hand, are powerful reasons that make my argument justifiable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , people
... he made a bad decision. Furthermore,people might feel under pressure when they are...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1792.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60668380463 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65255023695 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529562982005 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.5713045633 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.6666666667 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2083333333 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.20833333333 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15680663052 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.048402440252 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577671931664 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115452210115 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0652401648174 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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