Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Playing games is one of the popular trends nowadays among children. However, personally I agree with the statement that playing a computer game is a waste of time. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, Playing a computer game is not help us to face the real world. A computer game is totally a virtual world. Children who plays a game on the computer are totally unaware of the real world. Even he/she does not know how to play the same game in the real world. It is popular nowadays because of the lack of playgrounds around the vicinity where children live but unfortunately, it does not help them gain success in the real world game. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Last month, when I visited my uncle's house, which is in a city and meet with my cousin I saw a similar situation in my cousin's behavior. He is crazy about computer games. He plays lots of games the whole day and even he forgot to eat and drink and also his homework which was given to him by the school teachers. But when I took him to a nearby tennis ground to play tennis with him he didn't know how to play and hit the ball. Even if he started hitting, he missed most of the ball. I felt surprised that he played tennis the whole day when he was at home, but here he didn't even catch the bat. That's how I realize he had no idea of real-world games.
Secondly, children who play games all the time often forget to do everyday work. As a children, they have lots of things to do. They have their breakfast, launch, dinner, homework, etc. Whenever they play games on a computer they often forget their everyday routine. It also has a negative effect on their health. Their eye can easily be affected and most of the growing children have their eye problems. For instance, I have already mentioned my cousins. When he plays the video game on his computer he forgets about his daily homework. If he continues the game he played, it will negatively affect his health and also he will get a poor grade in his final examination.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that computer games negatively affect the children and they should not be allowed to play them. I feel this way because it will not help them to face real-world scenarios and they also will not get success in their study because of lack of concentration.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4200913242 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39387453887 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456621004566 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4751861204 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.7037037037 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2222222222 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55555555556 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268294597549 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0920744487032 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0966330367437 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19917153641 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660912515087 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 11.7677419355 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.06 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.88 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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