An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
As described, an international development organization, in response to the combat of vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything to promote the new type of millet. The author describes that a new type of millet cost more but farmers will be paid subsidies. People of Tagus readily accept a new type of food because this type of food is already familiar in the Tagus. Before the recommendation author must answer the following questions.
Firstly, are subsidies enough to cover the high cost of a new kind of millet? It is possible that government subsidies are not fully cover the cost of the new kind of millet. Another possibility is that after giving a certain amount of subsidy, the price of millet will increase further. Then it is not possible for farmers to cover the high cost of millet seed. If either of these happens, the conclusion is significantly weakened.
Secondly, is the new kind of millet properly compensate for the deficiency of vitamin A? It may not be compensated for the whole demand for vitamin A.It may also be possible that the production of the new kind of millet will be not expected and thus create a deficiency of vitamin A.If the author considers such possibility then the recommendation does not hold water.
In conclusion, as the recommendation stands now, it is significantly flawed because it is based on some uncertain assumptions. The author should give more evidence to solve this stated discrepancy. If those are answered properly then it is possible to evaluate the recommendation.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 261 350
No. of Characters: 1260 1500
No. of Different Words: 120 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.019 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.828 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.958 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 93 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 65 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.077 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.188 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.38 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.606 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 392, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... food is already familiar in the Tagus. Before the recommendation author must answer t...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... must answer the following questions. Firstly, are subsidies enough to cover t...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...conclusion is significantly weakened. Secondly, is the new kind of millet prop...
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Line 5, column 154, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...ated for the whole demand for vitamin A.It may also be possible that the productio...
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Line 5, column 287, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...d thus create a deficiency of vitamin A.If the author considers such possibility t...
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Line 5, column 287, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d thus create a deficiency of vitamin A.If the author considers such possibility t...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e recommendation does not hold water. In conclusion, as the recommendation sta...
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Line 7, column 202, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...dence to solve this stated discrepancy. If those are answered properly then it is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1297.0 2260.96107784 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 259.0 441.139720559 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00772200772 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03494060523 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 204.123752495 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478764478764 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 418.5 705.55239521 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.9839627182 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6428571429 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 5.70786347227 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.471581878732 0.218282227539 216% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15462303315 0.0743258471296 208% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125469724808 0.0701772020484 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252629394066 0.128457276422 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144642087649 0.0628817314937 230% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 98.500998004 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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