Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The purpose of television is to educate, not to entertain
Television, almost since its invention, is an inherent part of modern life of people in last decades. You couldn’t imagine a house without television. Television is the mandatory tool for filling free hours of all members of a family. I believe the statement of considering television as a educational tool rather than entertainment tool is not correct, while in my opinion it is better to consider T.V as a tool for entertain while could have some educational purposes.
We know most of people watch T.V in their free hours like after their job or school. Aim of these people is to putt of the pressure that they get while their job or school. Therefore, they don’t want to watch T.V only for education. They are seeking for some entertainment. If the television is a tool which convey only educational programs to the people, They hesitate to watch those programs and set off the T.V. Therefore, it’s not logical for T.V owners to just put educational programs on their time schedule, when they are seeking for more viewers of their programs for financial purposes.
I believe it is better to consider T.V as a tool for conveying educational messages ,which are useful to improve peoples culture and knowledge, with an entertain mental outfit. To elaborate that I am going to give an example from our national T.V. There was a t.v show on out television which called Mosabegheye Hafte when I was child. The show was a knowledge competition among some competitors. The host was asking them some general questions and the show at last had a winner who won the prize. The host’s presentation and the ambiance of the show, intrigued a lot of viewers on that time. So this show played a role either to improve the knowledge of viewers by asking question or entertain them and filling their free hours.
In summary, in my opinion considering television just for educational purposes and neglecting its educational role in people life is a wrong statement. Because people watch T.V to entertain them rather than acquiring some knowledge from that. Therefore, its better to use T.V to convey knowledge, while entertain people. The main issue here is how to make a program with valuable educational content which have an entertainment outfit to broadcast at T.V.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an
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Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...ave some educational purposes. We know most of people watch T.V in their free hours like afte...
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...ove peoples culture and knowledge, with an entertain mental outfit. To elaborate that I am g...
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...at last had a winner who won the prize. The host’s presentation and the ambiance of...
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Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...le in people life is a wrong statement. Because people watch T.V to entertain them rath...
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Discourse Markers used:
['if', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'in summary', 'in my opinion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.255980861244 0.229887763892 111% => OK
Verbs: 0.157894736842 0.158761421928 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0789473684211 0.0866891130778 91% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0334928229665 0.046263068375 72% => OK
Pronouns: 0.066985645933 0.0685040099705 98% => OK
Prepositions: 0.133971291866 0.118717715034 113% => OK
Participles: 0.0311004784689 0.0351676179071 88% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.81096481056 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0382775119617 0.0309702414327 124% => OK
Particles: 0.00239234449761 0.00188951952338 127% => OK
Determiners: 0.105263157895 0.0887237588012 119% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00239234449761 0.0209618222197 11% => More modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0191387559809 0.0139019557991 138% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2266.0 2387.08602151 95% => OK
No of words: 384.0 408.028673835 94% => OK
Chars per words: 5.90104166667 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48200974243 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.346354166667 0.338922669872 102% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.270833333333 0.251872472559 108% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.190104166667 0.174417080927 109% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.140625 0.112833075102 125% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81096481056 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4765625 0.524397521467 91% => OK
Word variations: 50.6940143429 59.2087087015 86% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.2857142857 20.5533526081 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9420474041 48.84282405 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.904761905 120.699889404 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 20.5533526081 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.285714285714 0.644075263715 44% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 89% => OK
Readability: 45.369047619 45.7405998639 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.62962962963 1.45489161554 112% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389974722316 0.300154397459 130% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.148900996073 0.103427244359 144% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.100868406181 0.0752933317313 134% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.46835112268 0.497263757937 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.121486563892 0.151897553556 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134556332765 0.114077575197 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741293191082 0.0781384742642 95% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.28809893546 0.336927656856 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.00858354413738 0.067059652881 13% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266126060651 0.210909579961 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0260305127158 0.0618886996521 42% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.91756272401 142% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 8.42114695341 71% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 13.6433691756 81% => OK
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Rates: 73 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 22 Out of 30