The purpose of television is to educate, not to entertain.
During history, many inventions such as the telephone, television, and the Internet have changed people's lives in different ways. Each of these facilities has some purposes and people depending on their requirements benefit from them. When it comes about television, a controversial question arises as to whether people use television in order to enhance their knowledge in various areas or they watch TV programs to have fun. I, personally, think that television is an entertainment tool for people because of two conspicuous reasons that I will elaborate on which in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, although there are many tutorial videos such as cooking shows or educational programs such as documentaries on television, people are fond of their television because of interesting series and exciting TV shows. Several statistical assessments on television program viewers have shown that the number of people who watch the television extremely increases when the fun programs begin to show. To be more specific, people access many educational sources such as different classes, magazines, the Internet, and so forth. However, they only can find daily interesting programs on television. For example, I frequently have seen that when an educational program starts to show people change the channel into a more interesting one. The more fun programs a channel has, the more contact it will provide, which proves that television is aimed to make fun time rather than education.
Second, although there are many choices to do in spare time, watching television is the cheapest and more convenient than anything else. People need something to shift their attention from the problems and difficulties of the hectic life, hence, they resort to something like television that exists in each home and is very easy to use. Considering the history of the invention of television can drive this notion home. The main purpose of television is fun because its invention was inspired by the Cinema. It goes without saying that cinema plays a vital role in entertainment. With the advent of television, people could watch kinds of those movies in their home which was very appealing for them. For example, my grandmother told me when they bought a television, nobody in their neighborhood has a television. Therefore, at night, neighbors and relatives gathered in her home so as to watch the television and have quality time in this way.
In conclusion, taking all information mentioned above into account, I believe that the purpose of television is to entertain. People not only are more passionate about fun programs, but they also use television in order to have an affordable and convenient recreation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 300, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...vision, a controversial question arises as to whether people use television in order to enhan...
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Line 7, column 882, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...bors and relatives gathered in her home so as to watch the television and have quality t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2292.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29330254042 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91827134163 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521939953811 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 724.5 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9598319825 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.6 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.65 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24934772409 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0774893228946 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709490612233 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165100313532 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439537138219 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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