The purpose of television is to educate, not to entertain.
During history, many inventions such as the telephone, television, and the Internet have changed people's lives in different ways. Each of these facilities has some purposes and people depending on their requirements benefit from them. When it comes to television, a controversial question arises as to whether people use television to enhance their knowledge in various areas or they watch TV programs to have fun. I, personally, think that television is an entertainment tool for people because of two conspicuous reasons that I will elaborate on which in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, although there are many tutorial videos such as cooking shows or educational programs such as documentaries on television, people are fond of their television because of interesting series and exciting TV shows. Several statistical assessments on television program viewers have shown that the number of people who watch the television extremely increases when the fun programs begin to show. To be more specific, people access many educational sources such as different classes, magazines, the Internet, and so forth. However, they only can find daily interesting programs on television. For example, I frequently have seen that when an educational program starts to show people change the channel into a more interesting one. The more fun programs a channel has, the more contact it will provide that it prove that television is aimed to make fun time rather than education.
Second, although there are many choices to do in spare time, watching television is the cheapest and more convenient than anything else. People need something to shift their attention from the problems and difficulties of the hectic life, hence, they resort to something like television that exists in each home and is very easy to use. Considering the history of the invention of television can drive this notion home. The main purpose of television is fun because its invention was inspired by the Cinema. Cinema plays a vital role in entertainment. With the advent of television, people could watch kinds of those movies in their home which was very appealing for them. For example, my grandmother told me when they bought a television, nobody in their neighborhood has a television. Therefore, at night, neighbors and relatives gathered in her home to watch the television and have quality time in this way.
In conclusion, taking all information mentioned above, I believe that the purpose of television is to entertain. people not only are more passionate about fun programs, but they also use television to have an affordable and convenient recreation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 297, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...vision, a controversial question arises as to whether people use television to enhance their ...
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Line 4, column 113, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
... purpose of television is to entertain. people not only are more passionate about fun ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2224.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28266033254 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9390764921 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524940617577 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8981491637 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.2 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.05 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252460472843 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079553102528 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760628801895 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16953307027 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0494476383428 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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