Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Rich people who do not work will be happy.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In my opinion, rich people not working won’t be happy. Not being rich, I can’t fathom the life style and mindset of a millionaire. Nonetheless, from my personal experience, being rich is not tantamount to being happy.
First, true happiness stems from self-actualization, and working is arguably the most profound way toward achieving this. In Maslow’s hierarchy of needs, self-actualization is situated at the top of the pyramid. While other needs, such as food and security, may be achieved by wealth, the highest need requires a commitment through working. Working is way of making full use of our inner potential, and by working, we can chase after our dream of a lifetime. We are giving through working, and by working, we feel that we are needed and thus a sense of achievement arises, making us feel happy. Conversely, if we are not working, we are receiving. Though we can receive a cornucopia of food and comfort with considerable wealth, our heart will be drowned by emptiness.
Second, the process of chasing after a dream, not the result of achieving a goal, is the source of fulfillment. If we lead an affluent life, it is likely that we already have everything we want. On the surface, we have nothing to worry about. However, human desire is infinite. When we have a lot, we want more, and what we have is always not enough to fulfill our appetite. On the contrary, if we have few possessions at hand, we will feel gratified if we make a little progress toward our dream through working. Thus, we will be proud of ourselves by what we have done every day and thus lead a fulfilling life.
In sum, while being rich can satisfy some biological needs of a human, it is through working that gives us a sense of fulfillment and happiness.
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Do you agree or disagree…
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Rich people who do not work will be happy.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In my opinion, rich people not working is unhappy. Not being rich, I can’t fathom the lifestyle and mindset of a millionaire. Nonetheless, I believe that wealthy people will not be happy if they do not work.
First, true happiness stems from self-actualization, and working is arguably the most profound way toward achieving this. In the hierarchy of needs proposed by Maslow, self-actualization is at the top of the pyramid. While some needs, such as food and security, may be achieved by wealth, the highest one requires a commitment through working. Working is a way of making full use of our inner potential, and by working, we can chase after our dream of a lifetime. We are giving through working, and by working, we feel that we are needed, and thus a sense of achievement arises, making us feel happy. Conversely, if we are not working, we are receiving. Though we can acquire a cornucopia of food and comfort with considerable wealth, emptiness will drown our hearts.
Second, the process of chasing after a dream, not the result of achieving a goal, is the source of fulfillment. If we lead an affluent life, it is likely that we already have everything we want. On the surface, we have nothing to worry about. However, human desire is infinite. When we have a lot, we want more, and what we have is always not enough to fulfill our appetite. On the contrary, if we have few possessions at hand, we will feel gratified if we make a little progress toward our dream through working. Thus, we will be proud of ourselves for what we have done every day and thus lead a fulfilling life.
In sum, work is vital to our well-being. Without work, even rich people will sense that something is missing and feel unhappy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, first, however, if, may, nonetheless, second, so, thus, while, such as, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1459.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75244299674 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87617169733 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530944625407 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.4465372232 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.0555555556 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0555555556 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0921563445234 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0403567803047 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479464275477 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0826175085082 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525806848593 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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