Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Rich people who do not work will be happy.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In my opinion, rich people not working is unhappy. Not being rich, I can’t fathom the lifestyle and mindset of a millionaire. Nonetheless, I believe that wealthy people will not be happy if they do not work.
First, true happiness stems from self-actualization, and working is arguably the most profound way toward achieving this. In the hierarchy of needs proposed by Maslow, self-actualization is at the top of the pyramid. While some needs, such as food and security, may be achieved by wealth, the highest one requires a commitment through working. Working is a way of making full use of our inner potential, and by working, we can chase after our dream of a lifetime. We are giving through working, and by working, we feel that we are needed, and thus a sense of achievement arises, making us feel happy. Conversely, if we are not working, we are receiving. Though we can acquire a cornucopia of food and comfort with considerable wealth, emptiness will drown our hearts.
Second, the process of chasing after a dream, not the result of achieving a goal, is the source of fulfillment. If we lead an affluent life, it is likely that we already have everything we want. On the surface, we have nothing to worry about. However, human desire is infinite. When we have a lot, we want more, and what we have is always not enough to fulfill our appetite. On the contrary, if we have few possessions at hand, we will feel gratified if we make a little progress toward our dream through working. Thus, we will be proud of ourselves for what we have done every day and thus lead a fulfilling life.
In sum, work is vital to our well-being. Without work, even rich people will sense that something is missing and feel unhappy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, first, however, if, may, nonetheless, second, so, thus, well, while, such as, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1430.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 304.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70394736842 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8181863876 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549342105263 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.0614023088 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.2631578947 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31578947368 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116726205181 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0518493549821 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.074405081382 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128282531713 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107390286424 0.0645574589148 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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