Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The rules made by societies even though they are tough they are much beneficial to young people to lead in the right pathway. In my opinion, I think that rules made by societies for young people are strict enough to protect them. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will elucidate in the following essay.
First of all, young people will be in good hands if they follow the rules and will not end up in any type of issue which is very harmful to them. There are many people outside waiting for these innocent faces to involve in their unfilthy businesses and subsequently, young ones will end up in a harsh environment. For instance, I have a friend from a high-class family who is in high school, she is greedy about money and also her parents are not strict enough to know what she was doing. Though she is a student she got a part-time job nearby school as a massage therapist. One day she joined that job and in a cascade, she was abused by her boss which is emotional trauma to such a young girl. In spite of her abuse, she continued to work because it gave her money though it was hard on her. Likewise, if she was under her parent's control and if they had given her enough money then she would not end up in such a harmful environment.
Furthermore, young people get attracted to terrible habits when they are not controlled by the rules of parents or societies. As I said in the above example young people not only head toward the wrong pathway but also end up in habituating to illegal activities. For instance, my friend when she was in middle school she didn't care about the rules of societies and also her parent's words, she got habituated to drugs at a very young age. There are many people who don't care about society rules because they are hard on them but eventually the same young people even though they are regretting after few years the damage has already done and made their careers spoil by inculcating these habits.
In conclusion, I say we should follow the rules of societies even though they are hard because it will help the young people not only to stay in a safe environment but also away from harmful habits when they are under watch.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, likewise, so, then, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1778.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.43391521197 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32011351513 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461346633416 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.9 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.7714931267 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.533333333 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7333333333 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4 5.45110844103 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147885873769 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0647757993171 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484096078958 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122317014631 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446180304674 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.71 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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