Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
By and large, societies have always been making rules and conventions in order to bring discipline and harmony to people's affairs in their daily lives. However, it goes without saying that teenagers are more inclined to disobey rules. They usually tend to find ways to make rounds over regulations. In this regard, some people believe that today, rules exposed to young people are too strict. I entirely disagree with this statement. In what follows, I will elaborate on two reasons to substantiate my perspective.
Firstly, I contend that in the bustling world we currently live in, parents have to work from dawn to dusk in order to be capable of satisfying the family's needs. Today, most developing countries are struggling with a financial crisis, or in developed countries, people are relentlessly working for long hours. As a result, parents spend less and less time with their families, and they can not have sufficient control over their teenagers. Regarding this fact, they have less time to define rules for their children and make them obey their values. Adding to that, schools put most of their effort into education and pay less attention to educating teenagers about morals. Consequently, it is evident that today younger people can behave more freely as long as they obey few rules that are considered as red lines. For example, when I was a student, there was not much strict rule in our school. We had only to obey those rules that were about our education. Our most important duty was to receive top grades.
Secondly, my conviction is that with immense technological and social advancements in today's hectic world, young people have more freedom than ever. It is not only because different gadgets and social platforms change the way people perceive the world around them, but these kinds of systems also enabled teenagers to have access to a wide range of information. This phenomenon has caused teenagers to be less obedient since they have less fear of supreme powers like the ones once people had in the past. To be more specific, one should compare modern teenagers with young people in the past. In the old days, teenagers were more concerned about the rules and values of their community. In fact, their rapport was restricted to few people around them. So, they found it necessary to obey rules and conventions in order to be accepted by those few people. Likewise, to receive affection and support from their family or relatives, they had to obey strict rules. Compared to that, today, teenagers have a broader point of view about various matters, and they show less respect to rules since nowadays societies accept freedom as one of the most significant values of human cultures.
According to the reasons mentioned above, it is a foregone conclusion that today societies have reduced their roles and young people do not have to follow too many strict conventions compared to the past. This, in part, results from radical shifts in modern societies and the limitations that this lifestyle has exposed to people's routines.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 727, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
.... In fact, their rapport was restricted to few people around them. So, they found ...
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Line 7, column 324, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
...ions that this lifestyle has exposed to peoples routines.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, likewise, regarding, second, secondly, so, as to, for example, in fact, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 85.0 52.1666666667 163% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2550.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 511.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99021526419 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52906178402 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508806262231 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 792.9 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8037315025 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0769230769 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6538461538 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.80769230769 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260646654314 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738312346444 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0754051137943 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182909927485 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521342385941 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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