Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, most societies are going to change their rules. The governments decide about the advantages and disadvantages which influence on the people and their quality of life. I believe that most of the new rules are at the service of young people to be freer and more comfortable and I have two main reasons for my statement.
First, I think that in the developed countries, young people have an independent career from their parents. About 100 years ago, young people had to continue their parents' career which was inherited from their grandparents too. For example, if a child was born in a shoemaker family, that child had to continue this family's job and he/she had no other way to follow his/her interests. But nowadays, we see the young people can follow their interests at the universities and there is no blame from parents against them.
Secondly, I believe that young people can choose their own lifestyle and not be ashamed of their intrinsic characteristics such as sexual tendency. They can decide about their sexual life and beliefs, and there is no rule from the side of governments against them. For instance, being homosexual and having a sexual relationship with the same gender was illegal even in the developed countries. Also, these people were blamed and abandoned by their family and friends and no one understood them. But, current governments help these people with the appropriate rules and give freedom to most minorities in society. Therefore, many people can have an easy and better life rather than in the past.
All in all, I believe that the rules that societies today set for young people are not strict at all because of two main reasons. First, young people are not obligated to follow their family inherited careers and they can pursue their interests in the universities and find a matching job. Second, young people can choose their own lifestyle today and they must not hide their sexual tendency. Also, the governments set some rules to protect the sexual minorities and support them. In addition, the governments try to change the traditional beliefs about these groups and create more cooperative societies.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1802.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01949860724 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60967258115 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473537604457 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 551.7 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.1324380988 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.111111111 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9444444444 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173348865129 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061393936877 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037827372598 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119704138472 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298773156676 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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