Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As technology and countries develop, the usefulness of stringent old rules has been called into question more. Personally, I believe some rules has expiration date, like so many other things, and I have doubt about effectiveness of old rules. I feel this way for several reasons.
Enacting law and rules was always supposed to be a way which enhance people subsistence level. However, it is undeniable that some of these rules were nothing more than restriction and it took lives and time to prove it to the authorities of that time. Thus, I think as people who live in this modern technology era, we should be able to distinguish restrictive law from efficient ones, better than our ancestors. I have this opinion that as time pass, the moralities and evaluations change. To be more specific, an action like being atheist might have been considered as a severe crime in the past, however, these days people really don't care about other's religions. As a result, nowadays arresting someone for his beliefs would be a bitter joke, in the contrary of old times which was considered a felony.
Moreover, it goes without saying that today's children and young people are more rebellious than before. Using law as a pressure to guide modern kids just exacerbate the situation and deviate them more from the so-called right way. My experience as an Iranian is compelling example of this. In Iran drinking is absolutely illegal and it has severe consequence if police find out about alcohol in someone's house. Plus it is strictly banned in our religion Islam. Old people really care about these rules and they won't sip any alcoholic drinks, however any party and gathering I attended, Drinks were served overtly and every one enjoyed drinking it a lot. Due to these reason, I believe things that are not naturally an infringement and they are merely restriction should be changed overtime cause people tolerance for these restriction have a limit and surpassing that limit would not be so good for the government.
In conclusion, old strict law which dictated a specific life style to the people must stay in the past and young generation won't bear old limitation after a while.
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Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, really, so, thus, while, i feel, i think, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1807.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91032608696 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64391840363 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573369565217 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9268151025 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.294117647 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6470588235 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0987942705526 0.236089414692 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0334682923425 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0282098890407 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0674452703077 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0226500630921 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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