Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Every societies have their own set of rules for their young which are different from other societies'. However, most of the time, the similarity between these rules in different societies are much more than their differences. Many people believe that these rules are needed for young people, and for improvement of societies. However, my opinion differs from these people, and I believe that societies' rules are too strict in today worlds for young people.
First and foremost, societies expect young people to know what they want to do with the rest of their life early in life, and when they are still in school. If a young person changes majors or is not sure about what he wants to pursue as a career, societies will look down on him. Since youngster has a lot different options to choose nowadays, it is harder for them to make a firm decision early in life, so I believe it is unfair to them to be looked down on if they are indecisive early in life and want to explore different options they have. I remember that my older brother was shamed for not knowing what he exactly wanted to do with his life when he was in his early 20s. Everybody would have compared him to his friend who decided to be a doctor early in life and had been working on his goal hardly in his early 20s. Society expectation putt lots of pressure on my brother which led him to have depression for a long time.
Secondly, because of the Internet and social media, societies compare young people to models and celebrities and expect them to be look like them. This make many youngsters to go through cosmetic surgery so they can meet social standards. Also young people suffer from depression and social anxiety more than ever because of these pressures. Many of my classmates who are in their early 20s, have been through cosmetic surgery, and most of them still feel that they are not enough which make them depressed and anxious because they feel that they will not ever meet society's standard.
In conclusion, in my opinion societies' rules are too strict nowadays and expect a lot from young people. Societies expect young people to know what they want to do with their life and shame them if they are indecisive about their future goals. In addition, societies compare youngster with models and celebrities and expect them to look like them, and this put lots of pressure on young people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: EACH_EVERY_NNS[1]
Message: 'Each' and 'every' are used with singular. Did you mean 'all'?
Suggestion: All
Every societies have their own set of rules f...
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Line 3, column 239, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...gery so they can meet social standards. Also young people suffer from depression and...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1956.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6460807601 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31613739106 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.41567695962 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 605.7 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5010324698 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.058823529 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7647058824 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163592743264 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744481833392 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566941763402 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123778590044 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599448642453 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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