Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Regarding weather young people nowadays are restrained by more social orders, answers can vary considerablly from idvidual to idvidual. Some people believe the young people were expected more by sociey, making them fail to be themselves, while others argues that it is more diverse and inclusive in current society. As far as I am concerned, my experience lead me to conclude that the former statement is more reasonable, and I will explain why I stand the viewpoint in the following essay.
To begin with, I believe the society become more and more liberal, indicating that people are more allowed to express themselves. Take the gender issue for example: when my mom was young, the girls were expected to get married soon as long as they turned into adult. Consequently, my grandfather refused to let her enter to the college, just because she was a girl, and she soon got married with my father after graduating from high school. Conversely, the girls are not be forced to marry someone when they become adults. Even though there are still some social rules ristricted the woman, they have more opportunities to explore their lives and achieve their dreams currently.
Futhermore, the society also become more inculsive to different kinds of people. In the past, if you did not fufill some social expectation, you were confined to be youself. For instance, the homosexual was determined as mental disease and illeagal behavior in the past. Under the circumstaces, they had no choice but pretend to be hetersexual, or they would be depressed by the society. In contrast, my country, Taiwan, passed the law of same-sex marriage few years a go, admitting the marriage between two men or two women. Therefore, the young gay and lesbian will not be forced to conceal themselves in the society today.
In a nutshell, I firmly believe that young people today are less confined by social order. I realize that there are still numerous absurd rules that expect young people to obey. Nevethelss, I believe I have substantiated reasons to support my point of view.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, conversely, if, regarding, so, still, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1721.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9884057971 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68719883841 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579710144928 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2623705339 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.235294118 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2941176471 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88235294118 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174985811586 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0570166758424 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509551817703 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116582388006 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0591735702071 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, conversely, if, regarding, so, still, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1721.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9884057971 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68719883841 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579710144928 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2623705339 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.235294118 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2941176471 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88235294118 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174985811586 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0570166758424 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509551817703 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116582388006 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0591735702071 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.