Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The juveniles usually tend to break the rules and esacpe the laws in order to prove themselves free or just because they do not understand the neccessity of these limits. However, I firmly believe that the rules we impose on the young people must be rather strict, the way they actually are. I put forward some reasons to substantiate my claim in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, I think most people nowadays suffer from the lack of disciplin in their professional life. Poeple have difficulty getting used to hard work and continuous effort in order to achieve their goals. Being suppressed by strict rules and limits from a young age makes people more hardworking and determined. I elaborate on my argument with an example from my personal life. When I was a child, I was obliged to have very good grades in school. This was the educational code in my family and my acquintances. I could never understand why I have to follow this rule in every situation regardless of the subject or my health condition, while my friends in school would normally get a bad grade and nothing bad ever happened to them. After I grew up, I realized that even though the grades of my elementary school would never be important in my whole life, that kind of hardworking attitude that I had to stick to, makes me a better employee in my workplace. Had I been raised in a not so much demanding family, I would certainly not have been one of the best performing employees in my firm.
Moreover, I am of the opinion that today, young people are exposed to a huge deal of social freedom compared to those in earlier generations. This freedom can bring about some dangers to the young people. Nonetheless, if these young men and women are raised by strict rules and limits, they would be safe from the harms of the social freedom they are provided with. For instance, if young people are strictly forbidden from drinking too much alcohol, that would form a habit in their personalities and when they are in a party, even without their families, the would not drink too much either.
To conclude, I state that imposing strict rules on children and young adults can be beneficial for their future selves. First of all, because they learn the vital concept of discipline and can implement it throughout their lives. Secondly, because that way they would be protected from the dangers of the social freedom that they own.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, i think, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2003.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75771971496 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5718246924 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527315914489 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2363051809 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.421052632 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1578947368 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.10526315789 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152814182478 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499301520917 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426703288382 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100277023296 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452478057599 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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