Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Is there anyone who can ignore the enormous and magic effect of the Internet in modern life? Undoubtedly, the Internet is one of the most valuable invention of humankind, such that it is an inseparable part of our life. The level of human's life is enhanced drastically since the born of the Internet. It brings us a mine of information and data; makes it possible to connect to all the people around the world; and help us to share and spread our ideas and thoughts. Some are of the opinion that accessing to this amount of data can endanger the individuals and be harmful. I, however, personally, do believe that the huge set of information provided by the Internet is such a invaluable gift. The reasons why I believe so are manifold--two of which, however, are of great consequence: connecting of people around the world to share experiences, ideas and etc.; and the facilities brought to day-to-day life.
To begin with, in the world which any link to each person is valuable, the Internet prepare the ground for an individual to go beyond the borders and connect to any people at any corner of the globe just by accepting the "difficulty" of just few clicks. As an evidence, the idea of making the world as a "global village" is on the basis of this worthwhile connections. People can communicate through this connection and share their experience; thoughts; as well as the result of their research, works and etc. This information exchanging can result in many advantages, let us consider, for instance, a researcher, who is looking for an appropriate narrow title in a vast field of study. Just in a few centuries ago, he or she must spends a great amount of their time reading into thousands of books and looking for what they want to address in their research. In contrary, now it is totally altered by favor of the Internet. One can access to a bank full of papers and documents, and examine them just by searching few keywords. Analyzing the previous works, on the one hand, can makes us a leading-edge researcher by preventing us to do a repetetive tasks and helping us to focus on the state-of-the-art ones, and on the other illustrates us the pre-experienced faults of other people. Therefore, as a result of evading the errors the money is achieved in days we all believe that "time is money".
Secondly, the major task of technology is to help us live a more comfortable and convenient life. The Internet, as an offspring of technology, plays a key role in facilitating our daily life. We enjoy the Internet in lots of moments of a day since we woke up and check the news during the breakfast, till the night trying to find out how to cook a delicous dinner. The Internet lives beside us and gives us many advices at each moment. It finds and suggest an uncrowded route for driving to circumvent the traffic jam toand save the time; prepares a way to pay our bills and transfers large amount of money in an extremely safe and fast manner; shows us "how to" do anything, from making a paper plane to sending a satellite to the moon; knows anything one can forget and reminds them in the blink of an eye, like the name of a soccer player, a place and etc; and above all, teachs us how to live a better life.
All in all, whether we accept it or not, the Internet is an indespensable part of our life. Its helping hand is always open to us. The harmfulness or usefulness of the Internet depends on the way it is utilized. If one use it in a correct way, he or she can enjoy a more efficient, more convenient and higher-level life-style in conjunction with save their priceless time. Any one who resists to face with the Internet and its advantages should open their eyes and see what did they missed before. It is time to go with the technology.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 676, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...mation provided by the Internet is such a invaluable gift. The reasons why I beli...
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Line 1, column 853, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...d the world to share experiences, ideas and etc.; and the facilities brought to day-to-d...
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Line 2, column 312, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...idence, the idea of making the world as a 'global village' is on the ba...
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Line 2, column 521, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
... as the result of their research, works and etc. This information exchanging can result ...
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Line 2, column 1100, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'make'
Suggestion: make
...he previous works, on the one hand, can makes us a leading-edge researcher by prevent...
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Line 4, column 226, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a correct way" with adverb for "correct"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...n the way it is utilized. If one use it in a correct way, he or she can enjoy a more efficient, ...
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Line 4, column 373, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Anyone'?
Suggestion: Anyone
...unction with save their priceless time. Any one who resists to face with the Internet a...
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Line 4, column 385, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'resists facing'.
Suggestion: resists facing
... save their priceless time. Any one who resists to face with the Internet and its advantages sh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 13.8261648746 231% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 109.0 52.1666666667 209% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3125.0 1977.66487455 158% => OK
No of words: 677.0 407.700716846 166% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61595273264 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.10090420048 4.48103885553 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.885681549 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 331.0 212.727598566 156% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488921713442 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 994.5 618.680645161 161% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 12.0 3.08781362007 389% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.0594324808 48.9658058833 180% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.740740741 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0740740741 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12813683929 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0386924859899 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0331338031072 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0867034636614 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357795717323 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 86.8835125448 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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