Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
" Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time."
which of these situations do you think is better.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Lifestyle has changed dramatically. One of the most noticeable aspects that have changed is the independence of young people. I believe that youngsters should find their ways and move out of the home. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, nowadays young people tend to move and leave their parents' house for many reasons, such as the need to live closer to their universities and workplaces. Indeed, in this way, individuals can save money instead of spending on transportation. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. When I was a university student, I left my parent's house and moved to a dorm. Then I left the house for the second time when I found jo. In both times, I tended to live near my workplace and university to save money. On the other hand. Living with my parents would cost me half of my budget.
Furthermore, living away from the family's house would increase self-esteem, confidence and start thinking independently. No one can deny that parents always provide emotional and spiritual support to their children. But, when a person leaves this supportive network, they will start seeing things independently. Moreover, sometimes parents might have different lifestyles from their children, which might affect the youngsters' personalities and perspectives. For instance, When I lived away from my family, my way of thinking changed noticeably. I started to think more about my future without any involvement from my parents and explore my surroundings. Based on this experience, young adults should find their own way and leave their parents' houses to find themselves and to form better and more mature personalities
In conclusion, living away from family indeed has pros and cons. However, I believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. This is because this experiment will teach you to become an independent and mature person. Moreover, in some cases living away from home has beneficial advantages.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, in some cases, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1694.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1963190184 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96374266084 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549079754601 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.4661631965 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.0 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8181818182 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90909090909 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238019567107 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628620748364 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054353817011 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137232336491 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0289260446129 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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