Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
It goes without saying that in this world where er live, students spend a lot of time in the schools with their teachers and friends. While some people believe that students are more influenced by their friends, others hold on the view that students are affected by their teachers. Personally speaking, I firmly agree with the former group. To substantiate my point of view, two significant reasons are being explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, students strongly feel emotional intimacy with their peers, so they tent to more communication with their friends and get effects from them. Students have a lot of things to share with their friends and they speak with another one about all aspects of their life such as their family problems, dreams to name but a few. This kind of relationship leads to mutual influence. For example, when I feel helpless and painful sense because of some frustrations, I go to my friends. They would sit in front of me and listen to my complaints and swear words and then comfort me. So, I want to communicate with my friends as more as possible, and I will accept all of the things that they say. In this way, they can easily influence me.
Secondly, students spend much more time with their friends, inside and outside the school. They go to school together every day and study in a group after their classes. So, they are seeing each other more than see others and have enough time to influence each other. For instance, my cousin was studying far away from his parents in another city. He lived in an on-campus dormitory with their friends as roommates. His roommate came from a different hometown and had a different dialect. Last year, when my cousin came back to our city, his dialect completely had influenced and changed to his roommate's dialect because he and his roommate spent much more time together.
In conclusion, taking two above-mentioned reasons into account, I do believe that students influenced by their friends more than their teachers. This is because not only do students felt intimate with their friends but also spend most of a day with them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, then, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1764.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81967213115 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52447779657 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527322404372 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6311430569 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.428380695538 0.236089414692 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129215453302 0.076458572812 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117752905952 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.299494849982 0.150856017488 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0918347928863 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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