Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For students who are planning to work in business, learning about psychology is more important than learning about technology. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, there a number of fields that students can choose to learn for their future career. However, it is not easy for them to decide which options would be appropriate. The students willing to work in business are not an exception. Some people may recommend them to study psychology while some others emphasize the need to learn about technology. While I admit that the knowledge of technology can be an asset for those students, studying psychology seems to be a better choice.
To begin with, the concepts and theories of psychology can be widely applied to a variety of fields in business. In doing business, it is quite important to deal with other people whether they are customers or counterparts. In many cases, businessmen have to persuade or convince those people and interpreting their behaviors based on the knowledge of psychology would be decisive in that circumstance. This fact is especially relevant to specific fields of business such as advertisement and marketing. Actually, a number of firms around the world have cooperated with the experts of psychology to examine the behavioral patterns of customers so that they can find out the best way to attract diverse purchasers.
In addition, while it is true that being informed of technology can be beneficial to businessmen in specific cases, it is not easy to confirm which sort of technology is truly relevant to them. There are a myriad of technologies and it is extremely difficult to study all of them even in a superficial way. For example, manufacturing cars require peculiar sorts of information that would not be helpful to produce toys. Therefore, the students who do not expect the exact field of their workplace cannot choose a specific category of technology as the one fit for their career.
In conclusion, it seems that the students who consider to work in business can have a broadly applicable benefit by studying psychology compared to studying technology. While it is reasonable that learning about technology can be conducive to their needs in some cases, it is not much feasible to decide which field it is when they are still students. Hence, it is better for them to other sciences such as psychology that can be more widely used.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, hence, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, sort of, such as, in many cases, in some cases, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1861.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98927613941 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88306359938 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471849865952 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8969736542 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.470588235 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9411764706 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4705882353 5.45110844103 192% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216019962592 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0754256795646 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0396387910037 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145291922761 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414056533321 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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