Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
There is no doubt that humankind instinctively has been seeking some ways to promote and achieve success in their job. There have been widespread debates between people about which approaches or abilities help them to reach their target. Personally, though, I deeply believe that the ability to relate well to people is more significant compared with studying hard in school. I feel this way for two compelling reasons, which I am going to explore into support my idea in the following essay.
To begin with, you will need to receive help from people no matter how much you have knowledge about your career. That is, nobody can claim that he is able to learn all things by studying hard in school. Therefore, they must talk to people, and the communication ability is an essential requirement for this goal. For instance, my colleague was too unsociable and she is not used to speaking with others. Once, she dealt with a problem in her work and has not consulted anyone, even though she has not known anything about that problem. Finally, this problem led her to a terrible disaster, So she had to resign. Had she had enough ability to relate to people, she would not have lost her job.
The second point I would like to mention is that successful managers have forged a relationship with their employee and other people. It is obvious that the ultimate objective of any people is that either they are promoted to the head of their company or they can establish their companies. Anyway, they could not achieve this aim if they had not enough ability to communicate. Let us take the example of my father working for a long time in his office and had extensive and professional experiences. Therefore, when his manager retired, he had outstanding merit to become a manager; yet another person could succeed, since he had a lot of relationship with whole employees in that office, and all of them would agree that he became manager. As a result, it is so crucial that if you wanted to succeed in your career, you should develop a relationship well with people.
To sum up, in my opinion, the ability to relate well to people is more momentous. This is because you need to relate to others to receive help and because an essential requirement for managers is this ability.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, finally, if, second, so, therefore, well, as to, for instance, i feel, no doubt, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1890.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74874371859 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57657283176 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522613065327 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0409892842 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4736842105 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9473684211 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42105263158 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267453641997 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0833975209998 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769168055886 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174404299564 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527136693801 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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