Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Studying hard in school is an indispensable key to have successful work in future. As far as I am concerned, I am not in favor of this statement which say in order to be successful in future career, the capacity to relate well to people is more vital than studying hard in school, which I will elaborate my reasons in following paragraphs.
First of all, when people study hard in their education step of their life, they can figure out which field is fit for them. People just can understand which ability they have if they experience all various fields in their life, specially when their are students. In addition, people by getting high score in specific field, feel so convenient and feel that they can be brilliant in that major. The recent research in this area had shown that people who have appropriate experiences through an specific field, can deal better with their future life. Furthermore, people who are in a high cachet of their work are the ones who have deal with some kinds of current works in their early stage of life, like when they are a student in a school. Therefore, had people experienced all different fields in their youth, they would be able to choose one appropriate work for themselves in future.
The second reason which needs to discuss some words is that working-hard in school make people be ready to working-hard in their future life. If folks knew that the critical key for being successful in every stage of their life is hard-working, they would strive to learn it since they were a student. My own experience in this area was that when I was a child, I studied very hard in which when my family told me be ready to hang out, I would refuse to go with them. As a result, I learned that in order to be able handling my own stuffs, I should work hard for them, and here we go, I am a boss of a huge manufacturing firm where thousands of people are working in it and it is a tremendous responsibility for me due to handle them in the best way I can do. Hence, not only do people know how they can work hard in their future career, but also they can reach to the best prestige in their society.
With consideration to all above reasons, for being successful in a future life, everyone should do their best in their school in order to be fit for their future work and ready to working hard in it. Do not you think it worthwhile more?
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, second, so, therefore, well, while, in addition, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1937.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.42237442922 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50719446019 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447488584475 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.9 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.8870789254 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.133333333 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2 20.6045352989 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223865580742 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0994528421251 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592203923385 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183258811214 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0708114572277 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.1575268817 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.95 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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