Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Preparation for future job is an essential topic from the beginning of the high school. Students choose their basic field of interest at this time and continue it at the university and then get ready to start their jobs. Although it is the basic principle that people should study hard in school and then in the university to be a qualified person, the ability to relate well with other people finally results in the success. In order to be successful in future job, one needs to work efficiently in groups and presenting his ability in the best way.
First, as all the jobs are a group work, everyone who wants to be successful in their working area should have great ability in communication. Anyone who has an individual job should be very skillful in having positive relations with others especially with his clients because proper behavior increases the loyalty of clients. For example, an expert dentist may lose his patients because he never smiles. This behavior makes the patient feel stress in the clinic although he does professional treatment on teeth. The patient tends to change his dentist and feel appreciated while doing he is under treatment.
Second, in a competitive market of jobs, people should present themselves in the best way to be employed. Obviously, it is first the perfect ability to relate well to other people for the employers to evaluate ones' performance in working area. After this ability, they consider the technical skills of an applicant. For instance, companies prefer to employ a person with medium knowledge but well communication abilities rather than a person with well knowledge and medium communication abilities.
In conclusion, it is important to achieve communication abilities to be successful in future job since people work in groups and need to present themselves efficiently.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, second, so, then, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1534.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 301.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09634551495 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79863213131 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551495016611 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6004046426 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.571428571 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21428571429 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240265643837 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0828020888138 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0715402126101 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15799835916 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492376218237 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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