Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
One of the most controversial subjects, which often provoke many discussions is prosperity in career and professional life. Some people keep endorsing the claim that interaction with other people has more positive effect on success in job whereas others dismiss this idea holding the idea that studying hard is more effective. It is my firm conviction that interacting people provides more success in future career. In what fallows, I will thoroughly elucidate what rationale my perspective is based on.
The first and most significant reason why I recommend this idea is that by socializing and having more connection with people who have experience in various areas related to our profession we can learn an unlimited skills and knowledge from them. My own experience as a diligent intern is a compelling example of this. Right after my education, I started working as an intern in a building company whereas my classmates prefer to continue their education in order to be successful in their future job. Therefore, I was provided to cooperate with famous architects in the mentioned firm and learn perfect executive and designing skills besides business managing principals which I could not get through studying in any university. It is indisputable that how that experience helped me to establish my own designing atelier and become one step forward from others.
The second pivotal vindicating point regarding benefits that people can bring up for us to success in our job is that by connecting more and more people we will face more differential doors and opportunities. To delineate, each individual that we meet can introduce us to more successful people working in our field of interest or even other field which we had not think of ever. For instance, working as a designer on several projects simultaneously provide me a chance to relate an employer which tends to commence a business in building complexes in different cities. Obviously, if I refuted his cooperation and attended university in order to continue my education, I would never be successful in my career by expanding my business.
To put in a nutshell, in contrast to public belief that just studying is the only key to success in future professional life, interaction can play more noticeable role. Indeed, more interactions reinforced us with wide world of knowledge and skills that are never taught in schools and university and also benefits us with more prosperous opportunities
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 596, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to perfect'
Suggestion: to perfect
...hitects in the mentioned firm and learn perfect executive and designing skills besides ...
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Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'thought'.
Suggestion: thought
...st or even other field which we had not think of ever. For instance, working as a des...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, whereas, for instance, in contrast, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2065.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1625 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98867759218 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5425 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.6783319904 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.666666667 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6666666667 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227466623334 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0753989905345 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0676433443327 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149404890228 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344732569987 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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