Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children(five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The education in any given society plays a pivotal role in the development of that society. With this in mind, there is heated controversy about whether governments should spend money on universities or spend on children's education. As far as I am concerned, the education of very young children is far more critical. The reasons why I believe so will be elaborated upon hereunder.
First, the young generation in every society is the cornerstone of the development of that society. I mean, if the government provides an excellent educational environment for children, they will probably become very interested in science and will pursue it in their future. Children will become so passionate that even if their universities were not satisfying enough, they would attend universities abroad in order to achieve the best education. By doing so, and after they graduated, they will come back to their home countries and help the economy to develop, either by teaching in their own universities or other ways. For instance, there are many countries, especially in East Asia, such as South Korea and Singapore, that did not possess excellent universities a few decades ago. They invested in children and their education, and now these countries are at the forefront of development and technology.
Second, investing in the young generation's education helps to guarantee a more healthy generation, and significantly decreases the crime statistics. It is statistically proven that there are very few criminals in well-educated people. They commit fewer crimes, and they will also obey the rules and help to develop a safe society. My own observation demonstrates this reality. About twenty years ago, there was a family in our neighborhood, who had two sons. One of them attended school, and one did not. The one who went to school was able to go to university and found a decent job. He became a role model in the community because he never committed a crime. His brother, on the other hand, did not go to school or college. Because he had to make money, he started illegal jobs to feed his family and got arrested a few months later. So, as I said, imagine a whole society be like the earlier brother. I think society will be much safer and more pleasant to live in.
In conclusion, with all this taken into account, I strongly believe that investing money in the very young children's education has more significance than spending money on universities. Since this well educated young generation will lead the country to development. Also, they will make society safe and hospitable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...sionate that even if their universities were not satisfying enough, they would attend universities ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'generations'' or 'generation's'?
Suggestion: generations'; generation's
...nology. Second, investing in the young generations education helps to guarantee a more hea...
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Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ce than spending money on universities. Since this well educated young generation wil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so, well, for instance, i mean, i think, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2154.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02097902098 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90525567522 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543123543124 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 699.3 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.7592687325 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.16 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.16 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25163137783 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0624917546948 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0733053963884 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178935153302 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0726111921704 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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