Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Education plays an essential role in our society. Education is the passport for the future, for tomorrow belongs to those who prepare it today. No doubt that there are upsides and downsides of investing more money on toddler's education as compared to Universities. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely propose to spend more money on the education of very young children as compared to colleges, and would develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, very young age is the best nurture time for children, which means that they can be moulded and trained as per the desired social and academic needs. If the required amount is spent by the government to improve the primary schooling, substansial savings cane be achived in the future, especially for universities. The Universities don't need to invest money and efforts to improve basic knowledge such as language skills, basic programming, analytical skills, etc of children. I must say that my opinion on this matter is profoundly influenced by my own experience. For example, I am working as a Sales Engineer in a construction company situated in Noida, India. Last year, on international assignment, I was relocated with my family to Heidenheim, Germany, where I found that a special allowance known as Kindergeld was offered for children's development. As a result, I could sent my 6 years old son to additional athlete training, which made him healthy over time. As we can see from this example, had the government not endowed the referreed allowance, I would have not sent by child for additional training.
Secondly, in the beginning, parents have less financial resources to support their children because they started to work seven or eight years earlier, so in case a government supports a primary education, that will help parents to provide their children a quality education. Drawing from my brother's experience, he is staying with his family in India, which is a developing nation. After graduation, he opted to choose musician field, but somehow he did not achieve success in his career as of today. Whereas, government in India does not support a primary education; consequently, he is not able to provide comprehensive academic education to her seven years old daughter.
To conclude, I am of the conviction that a government should spend ore money on the education of very young students. This is because children can receive additional training and can complete basic education, if their parents are not financially stable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'toddlers'' or 'toddler's'?
Suggestion: toddlers'; toddler's
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'send'
Suggestion: send
...drens development. As a result, I could sent my 6 years old son to additional athlet...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, second, secondly, so, whereas, for example, no doubt, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2118.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12832929782 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94868534012 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561743341404 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 670.5 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1092941282 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.666666667 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9444444444 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285426200125 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817513698152 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618863912107 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171101889437 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588001920819 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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