Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
The issue of whether trying new things and taking risk would help a person to be successful or doing what they are familiar with it aroused much controversy among people with different ages and different perspectives. Definitely, some people if asked this question would agree with the statement that trying new thing and risking in their life is a better choice, while, others have a negative attitude toward this idea. As I am concerned, my personal preference is the first opinion. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on arguments to support my view.
The first point to be mentioned is that experiencing the new area is the best way of grasping about yourself. In fact, the sticking to our regular programs which are easy for us to do is a hinder to self-recognition. While, when you leave your comfort zone, you inter the new world with different perspective and features that you can test something else in other areas. Consequently, it provides you an opportunity to know the strengths and weaknesses of your personality and also, your talent. To illustrate this idea, let’s consider the following example. One of my friends was a professional baseball player and played in a famous team for several years. Three years ago, he decided to play football because he wants to test other sports too. After three sessions of practice, his coach realizes that he is so gifted in football. Now, he is one of the fix members of our national team.
In approaching this issue, apart from the point that I mentioned above, another reason that deserves some words is that every time you try new things, you gain some valuable knowledge and skills that would be very useful in the future. For example, when I was a teenager, I participated in French class in my spare time. At first, it was so hard for learning new languages and several times, I had decided to quit but by motivations of my teacher, I finished my classes, finally, I could learn to speak and write in French. But when I took the class, I have never thought of it would be one of the requirements of my favorite job in the future. Thanks to this class, I could get a job while there are a lot of people applied for this job position.
By the way of conclusion, based on the arguments that explored above, I am of the opinion that when you try to experience new thing, it would benefit you some valuable opportunities to achieve a better seeing about your personality and your talent. Furthermore, it might be useful in your future life by enhancing your chance to get your goals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hancing your chance to get your goals.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, if, so, while, apart from, for example, in fact, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2111.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 451.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68070953437 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7088647421 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532150776053 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.1586003891 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.55 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.55 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233798680826 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0576240067116 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068312887935 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146737331832 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0798323160887 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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