Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.Use specific reasons and examples t
In the modern world, cutting-edge technology has penetrated every facet of people's lives, educating children is one of them. The question that arises in this regard is that whether using technological devices has made educating children more difficult compared with the past or not. While some people are inclined toward the idea that spending so much time on the cell phone, online games, and social networking has wasted a lot of children's time, and as a result, have an adverse effect on their education, others believe in the advantages of using such technologies. As far as I am concerned, I am of the opinion that the advantages of using technologies in educating children are immense and indisputable. In the following paragraph, I will delve into some reasons and examples justifying my point of view.
The first reason coming to my mind is that having access to technologies such as the telephone and social networking not only provides pupils another source of education but also gives them chance to learn from the achievements of their more talented classmates. In the class, the teachers usually tutor the rudimentary materials, and it is the responsibility of children to grasp their class material in depth. Therefore, in today's world, they have an opportunity to use devices such as smartphones and computers to exchange their point of view and learn from each other, especially from the ones who are more gifted than them. For instance, they can use apps such as Telegram and WhatsApp and create a group study for sharing their ideas and thoughts about the subject and evaluate the subject from other perspectives.
Another noteworthy reason is that using technological devices can improve brain activity and long turn memory. Nowadays, scientists have proved that there is a significant correlation between using the technology and the high performance of the brain since using the technology substantially increases the spread of synaptic pathways in the brain which improves the power of memory. Therefore, although playing games and social networking seems useless, their beneficial advantages confirmed by findings of various studies. For instance, the Finland children have been shown the highest academic performances in comparison to many other countries in spite of their high use of technologies and playing games.
To summarize, from what has been discussed above, using cell phones, social networking, and playing games not only benefits students to learn from each other through new modern devices but also it has improved their brain activity which helps them to learn better and faster.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 258, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...rain activity which helps them to learn better and faster.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, while, for instance, such as, as a result, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2205.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26252983294 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81793160788 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529832935561 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.8363602006 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.5 100.406767564 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9285714286 20.6045352989 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217688982498 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770832151951 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524885835934 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128961625047 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0847699832024 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 11.7677419355 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.82 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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