Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The issue of whether sports and social activities should receive the same amount of budget as classes and libraries aroused much controversy among people of different ages and different perspectives. Definitely, some people if were asked would agree with the statement that sports and social activities are as important as classes and libraries and they should be given the same amount of financial support while others have a negative attitude toward this viewpoint. As far as I am concerned, after taking various factors into consideration, I am in agreement with the former group viewpoint. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on the arguments to support my view.
The first point to be mentioned is that participating in sports is beneficial for student’s health. Students spend up to 8 hours of each day at school that means they spend most of their time in the classes and seat on the chair. Many of researches proved that youngsters who are usually students suffer from obesity due to their sedentary lifestyle. As a result, they are more susceptible to chronic diseases like diabetes, cardiovascular diseases, and blood pressure. Therefore, the university should consider this issue when devoting the budget to provide students updated and new facilities for exercising. With this way, they encourage more students to engage in a great variety of physical activity based on their taste.
In approaching this issue, apart from the point that stated before, another reason that deserves some words is that a purpose of educating is not just teaching students theoretical and practical lessons, but also university should prepare students for their future life. After graduation, they have to enter the society and they need a lot of skills to be a successful person in this hectic and competitive world. You know, just high GPA could not help you to distinguish yourself at work interview to get the job, as many employers are looking for the employees with good social skills like communication skills and the ones who could work as a team member. Hence, the university could allocate a good budget for a variety of workshops to improve student’s social skills.
By the way of conclusion, based on the arguments above, I am of the opinion, the university should devote the same financial support for sports and social activities to encourage students to do exercise and also by improving their social skills prepare them for future life.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, so, therefore, while, apart from, you know, as a result, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2067.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12903225806 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82368396618 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516129032258 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.4511183166 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.8 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8666666667 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252413380768 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755932841827 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0754984905127 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160041503825 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.08409335346 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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