Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Taking risks and threating the life is a debatable topic. While some people believe that taking risks are not worthwhile, I think that taking risks would help me to be successful and to achieve my goals. From my vantage point, doing new things gives me the opportunity to have a better life and experience some different situations.
To begin with, having some new challenges provide the chances of better living quality. For example, last year I decided to change my job. The job that I had, paid me reasonable amount of money monthly and its environment was so peaceful. Thus, I was satisfied by my job. But I was seeking for some new opportunities like high salary and dynamic environment. Furthermore, I was so curious to know how the environment of other companies is and how they are working. So, I applied for a new company and I was hired. Actually, I took a risk by this action because if in the new company was not as good as the past company that I used to work in, I would be so regretful. Thus, taking risk sometimes effect dramatically in one's situation.
Along with better quality of life, taking risks would help a person to experience some different things and find what the best thing to do is. For example, I used to play different music instruments to find the one that attracts me more. I used to play guitar, piano, violin and some Iranian musical instruments until I could find which the one that I like most is. I found Setar, one of the traditional music instruments as my favorite one and I kept playing it until now. Right now I’m professional player of Setar. Also I won some different music awards for my playing. Besides, I’m making so much money from teaching different musical instruments.
To conclude, I think that seeking for new things provide not only a better life, but also a good knowledge of different things. Thus, don’t keep on doing your current activities, try different things and I promise that you will be thriving.
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'besides', 'but', 'furthermore', 'if', 'so', 'thus', 'while', 'for example', 'i think', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.186104218362 0.229887763892 81% => OK
Verbs: 0.178660049628 0.158761421928 113% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0992555831266 0.0866891130778 114% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0570719602978 0.046263068375 123% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0918114143921 0.0685040099705 134% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0967741935484 0.118717715034 82% => OK
Participles: 0.0471464019851 0.0351676179071 134% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.69463180226 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0322580645161 0.0309702414327 104% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0645161290323 0.0887237588012 73% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0124069478908 0.0209618222197 59% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0173697270471 0.0139019557991 125% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1987.0 2387.08602151 83% => OK
No of words: 349.0 408.028673835 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.69340974212 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48200974243 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.318051575931 0.338922669872 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.223495702006 0.251872472559 89% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.14899713467 0.174417080927 85% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.117478510029 0.112833075102 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69463180226 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507163323782 0.524397521467 97% => OK
Word variations: 53.3685618708 59.2087087015 90% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.619047619 20.5533526081 81% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.620511811 48.84282405 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.619047619 120.699889404 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.619047619 20.5533526081 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.571428571429 0.644075263715 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 38.9686178196 45.7405998639 85% => OK
Elegance: 1.00757575758 1.45489161554 69% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266897796824 0.300154397459 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.137600473005 0.103427244359 133% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0893232329799 0.0752933317313 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.448522381199 0.497263757937 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.14979976559 0.151897553556 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869371856162 0.114077575197 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660910818876 0.0781384742642 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.238019968272 0.336927656856 71% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0274834201564 0.067059652881 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178926695394 0.210909579961 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0241578487819 0.0618886996521 39% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.