Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in such a sophisticated world where people are putting all their efforts to have a better life, considering the factors and ways to be successful is a rational task. One of the most contentious issues having been brought up recently is whether successful people such as businessmen should try new things or stick out the tasks they know they do well. Some people strongly hold the view that people should keep on the way they are professional in and do not put their positions in risk However, the majority of people contradict this idea and look at this concept through a different lens. As a matter of fact, I subscribe to the view of those people. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will delve into some conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my point of view.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that making risks or trying new experiences not only leads individuals socialize more with other but also it is a profound opportunity to expand their field of work. For example, my uncle used to be afraid of installing new fields for his factory. Ultimately, he made up his mind and started to discuss with other related companies. Whenever he and his colleges met up, they provided new plans to expand their industries. Either making friends or making money, was result of putting himself into the risk of trying new opportunities. Moreover, economical scholars from all over the world contend that risk is one of the key factors of being successful and wealthy person. So they organized an experimental program to estimate the effect of making risk on wealthy people. The results were astonishing: over 90 percent of them started being wealthy as they try new methods or experiences in their field of work and did some unusual and out-of-routine tasks in their work.
Another subtle point to be mentioned is that although making some new experiences does not probably result in success, this is a perfect teacher for keeping up and not giving up. For example, if scientists did not fail when they made risk, most of fundamental issues would not have been established and science would have been so primitive. Furthermore, there has been a great deal of research into the potential benefits of failure in individual’s life indicating that the sense of achievement is gained by sequence failures. I remember when I was a student and I embarked on having two courses simultaneously. At first, I was disappointed, but after making more risk on my choices, I finally could turn out well. Withstanding on difficulties of risk and failure eventually shows the results very well.
To put it briefly, contemplating all reasons and factors, one soon realizes that trying new things would lead people to the best opportunities and positions. Even though it makes failure, the results would be beneficial. Consequently, I firmly recommend that every individual put their life into the risk and tolerate to see the best results.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 513, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n and do not put their positions in risk However, the majority of people contradi...
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Line 7, column 310, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'tolerate seeing'.
Suggestion: tolerate seeing
...vidual put their life into the risk and tolerate to see the best results.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, so, well, for example, such as, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2466.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94188376754 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8753779093 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511022044088 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 747.0 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9406845425 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.090909091 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6818181818 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185730698648 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051599316746 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532877280651 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112821739724 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524462207376 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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