It is clearly understood that in such a sophisticated world, everyone needs to take risks in their life and do new things. But the question is this way help people to become more successful in their life. For answering, this question is necessary to know about the fact that most people believe successful people do some activity that they know exactly how going to do well. Whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. As far I am concerned, doing new things, and learning more skills help people to improve their lives, and become successful people in their life. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that people spatially when there are young have this opportunity to learn more knowledge and skills. They have good energy and are enthusiastic for do a new activity and take a risk. This is very important for everyone to do have enough courage in their lives to take risks. For example, I always try new things in my life, I start working in a financial company, and in this period I learn so many skills, and after a while, I use these skills in my professional career. So I believe for becoming a successful person, how to play a key role in future is very necessary to try new things.
Another reason which should be taken into consideration is that when people try new things they arrive at a high level of understanding themselves. To be more clear they do many things in the primary of their professional career, and when they become mature they knew exactly where they standing. They could paint the future of their life map, and follow this map in the future. On the other hand, new ideas, and new services could be very useful, and popular among people. So if someone learns a new skill, and use it in the future could be more successful than others, but is very necessary to mention the fact that, this learning should happen at the beginning of adult life. For example, my uncle did not follow my grandfather and built their own business, every member of the family has disagreed whit him, but he always believes himself so neve gave up, and after a while, he learn so many things and accommodate many experiments. Nowadays he has his factory whit a lot of workers, and he become a successful person in our family.
To put it briefly, if one weighs the merits and demerits of the aforementioned statement, one soon realizes that everyone should try doing new things, and take risks in their lives, and do only what they know how doing well is not enough. In fact, there is a myriad of other reasons, supporting the above statement, which could be mentioned but not embraced due to the dearth of time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 376, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...they know exactly how going to do well. Whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspe...
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Line 3, column 882, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'learns'.
Suggestion: learns
... so neve gave up, and after a while, he learn so many things and accommodate many exp...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, but, first, if, so, thus, well, whereas, while, for example, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2233.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 482.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63278008299 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55297432382 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45643153527 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 701.1 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 16.0 1.86738351254 857% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7799917853 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.65 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361308995553 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111876942129 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109872503024 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253292193372 0.150856017488 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0740886045915 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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