Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

As one of the most important roles in the students’ educational life, teachers, have a giant influence on the future of students. They always try to help their classes in order to motivate the students to do great things and being useful people. The topic of whether they must be paid more by their activities and students learning or not is a point that we want to discuss in this passage. Some people agree that the teacher whose students are learned better should be paid more. The other people disagree this statement. My opinion is closer to the first group and I am going to declare my claim by the next paragraphs.

First, it can be a giant help for teachers who cannot afford their lives or are in a difficult situation. The teachers who are in bad financial situations and they cannot provide goods for their family can try harder to higher the efficiency of their teachings in order to make more money. For instance, a teacher whose mother has an illness that requires expensive treatments can see this way as an opportunity to raise his salary by learning their students better. By this mean he can earn enough money to afford the treatment for his mother. Therefore, relating the payment of the teachers with their students’ learning quality can be a great motivation for teachers and can help them to stay strong in critical financial situations.

Second, it can increase the efficiency of the whole educational system by increasing the quality of individual student’s learning. A teacher trying to help the students better in order to enhance the quality of their learning is consequently helping the educational system and can raise the efficient time of the schools or universities. Due to this enhancement in the quality of teaching, students can learn more subjects or can learn the same amount of subjects deeper than they use to learn in a same amount of time. Hence, the efficiency of the schools and the other places based on educational system can lead to a higher level and it can be very helpful for the students.

In conclusion, the statement that teachers should be paid more when their teaching qualities are higher is claimed to be true due to the motivational effects on teachers who want to earn more, and enhancement in the efficiency of the students’ educational life. Therefore, it can be very convenient to build the teachers’ payment on the amount of students’ learning.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 454, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
... the teacher whose students are learned better should be paid more. The other people d...
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Line 5, column 482, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...ame amount of subjects deeper than they use to learn in a same amount of time. Henc...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2014.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86473429952 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74382526709 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.444444444444 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 608.4 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4447293973 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.470588235 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3529411765 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82352941176 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235180805319 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0953741064182 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665372044467 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172666712235 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638734238762 0.0645574589148 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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