Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Regarding the topic concerning the permission of the television advertising that attract attention of young children (aged two to five), I am strongly inclined to take the opposite side of the topic and I believe that there are numerous advantages to let young children watch television advertising. Being familier with the society, enhancement of their knowledge about the things that parent could not learn children directly and using as a tool to entertain children are advantages of television advertisement. Although, there are some disadvantages that cannot be repudiated such as increase the expectation of children or understanding some critical things which are not appropriate for their age, on the whole, the advantages outweigh disadvantages. To elaborate more on the topic mentioned the following analytical reasons and examples will be presented.
First and foremost, the television advertisement provide a vision about the society conditions and what approximately happen in their surrounding. The young children cannot permenantly experience the events happened out of their homes, watching their peers behaviors and what the some places exactly like. But the television is an interface opening a window to vast area of their small homes. In some cases, children through a television advertisement might see the different cities, some needs of the society and the critical factors which highly care about them in the society. In addition, the domain of children knowlege can be enhanced remarkably when it comes to watching television advertisements.
Another primary advantage of television advertisement can be ascribed as a tool for children entertainment. The television advertisements use different techniques to attract attention of different levels of a society such as broadcasting a beautiful music, exciting animation and gorgeous graphical visions. These methods can exceedingly attract the attention of young children and a young child can watch a television advertisement for a long while. The important of television is so significant that without it most of children feel boring.
To recapitulate, the television advertisement has lots of advantages particularly being an interface to enhance general knowledge of children and an entertainment tool. Although, some television advertisement includes matters that appropriate for adults such as sextual issues, in my oppinion, with the perfect control of parent, children can watch most of the television advertisement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the children') or simply say ''most children''.
Suggestion: most of the children; most children
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, regarding, so, while, in addition, such as, in some cases, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2134.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.73655913978 4.8611393121 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29445327194 2.67179642975 123% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 672.3 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3203414104 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.266666667 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257505149616 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0977914443878 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457100267892 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171909171909 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588958083387 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 11.7677419355 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 58.1214874552 52% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.31 10.9000537634 150% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 10.002688172 210% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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