Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I agree with the proposed statement. Personally saying, I think television advertising towards young children should not be allowed because, in my perspective, they will have bad effects on young children. Some people might say that television advertising is entertaining for young children, but I say there are some issues with that view. I have mentioned some of my experiences and reasons to defend my idea.
For example, my close friend has a girl who is four years old. My friend always lets her watch television programs such as Cartoons or animations, her girl is interested in watching television advertising, especially about cookies and candies. Someday, when my friend and I with her girl went to a supermarket, her child started to cry and made her mom buy cookies and candies. My friend said to me that her girl is like that when she goes to these markets. Now her girl is twelve years old, and her teeth are damaged, because she never left her addiction to sweet things like candies.
For another example, I know a young couple. They are our neighbors and have a boy who is five years old. The young parents always complain that their boy wants to buy anything that television advertising shows, and if they do not buy those things, he will embarrass them in front of other people. His mother always says to me that they have to buy many unnecessary things, so they can not save much money for other necessary things. Television advertising has had a bad influence on their life.
To sum up, I think parents should control their children not to see all the television advertising. In this way, they can buy only good things and make their life healthy.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, for example, i think, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 52.1666666667 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1379.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 291.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73883161512 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61826355116 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539518900344 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.338649133 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.1875 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1875 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.3125 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161257122593 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628029059951 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0723768381499 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108009123669 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.094370809734 0.0645574589148 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 86.8835125448 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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