Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Undoubtedly, advertisements are not only the best way the companies used to show their products, but also the great opportunities for customer to learn about to merchandize. Personally, I believe advertisement used to target young children are beneficial for families.
I feel this way for two reasons, I will elaborate on the following essay.
To begin with, most young parents need these types of commercials to learn about children’s products. Some parents have no experience in parenting, and they don't know some types of food or the toy for they young children. However, by watching television commercials they can learn about some products and decide what to buy. To illustrate thoroughly, I remember two years ago when I had my first child, I was living far from my parents. My wife and I struggled to know which product to buy for our son. I used to watch advertisement in order to know the types of food or new children’s games to buy. Hadn't I watched these programs; I would have missed out on this information.
Furthermore, throughout the advertisement parents can save some money. Some companies provide some coupons and discount through the TV commercials. Among numerous brands on the market, having a discount options can help us to save money on some products. For example, when my son was four years old, I was always following children’s programs with him just to target the potential offers. I obtained the opportunities to receive some best deals on kid’s toys. I did save much money on my son product just by watching adverts.
In addition, children of age between two and four are not influenced by these Tv adverts. For instance, my son didn't care so much about the commercials, his focus was on his preferred programs. I believe this is because he was so young to understand. As a result, the advert didn't affect him personally, He was always focusing on children cartoons.
In conclusion, I firmly think that adverts targeting young children are very important especially for parents, because they can learn about the kid's products and get some discount on some merchandise.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1772.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00564971751 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94817287882 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516949152542 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.6418671107 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.380952381 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8571428571 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52380952381 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116847185632 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0411923603027 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407389772488 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0692445266835 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0262880402394 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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