Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Television advertising directed toward young children aged two to five should not be allowed Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Advertisings should be directed toward that ones who are able to perform critical thinking before purchase the announced product. It is known that children are not able to perform such a difficult task. I strongly support the idea that television advertising directed toward very young children should not be allowed. I feel this way for the following reasons.
Firstly, children, specially the youngers, do not have psychological maturity that is necessary to filter or select information. Besides, they are not able to decide what is good or bad for them. Therefore, advertising of products that are consumed by the little ones should be directed toward parents, who are able to make decisions.
Secondly, if this kind of advertising is not controlled, a massive quantity of products that are not safe or healthy could be announced. Which could foster bad habits toward young children, not only nutritional bad habits but also behavioral. For example, they would like to eat every kind of candies that are presented in a colorfull and fun way. Furthermore, if parents do not allow them to eat this attractive food they would behavior in a bad manner in order to obtain what they want.
Finally, as they are not mature yet, the advertising could promote deleterious consuming behavior in young children. They would demand all products they see in television. Consequently, this would generate a consumer culture in kids. On the other hand, if they are not exposed to this so early, they have increased chance to not be youngs or adults with noxious consumer habits.
To sum up, I strongly believe that the television advertising directed toward young kids should be prohibited because it is too premature promote such consumer habits and culture at this age range.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, i feel, kind of, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1489.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 291.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11683848797 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76894925604 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529209621993 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8526583179 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0625 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1875 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4375 5.45110844103 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233393783589 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0816421407111 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0855012998451 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148103969029 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0725361679501 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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