Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Television advertising directed toward young children aged two to five should not be allowed Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people advocate targeting young children for TV commercials has no problems. However, in my opinion, I strongly disagree to them and believe that placing television ads for young kids should be disallowed. I will support my viewpoint why TV ads on young children can be injurious for the following two reasons.
First of all, young children in ages between two to five does not have a concept of economy such as, spending money on commercial goods or recognizing the reasonable price for certain products. Ignorance of such economic concepts brings about harmful burden for their parents. For example, there were many cases where children who were enticed by a mobile game ad and purchased in-app game items without understanding its prices. The problem is more severe because most of the times, children did not place it once but rather, placed it numerous times causing huge amount of money accumulated by small purchases.
Secondly, children being in a stage under development mentally, should be protected by not disturbing their focus. For instance, young children tend to watch contents for kids like animations regarding education or toys. While they are focusing on a certain episode, exhibiting an ad in the middle can be distracting which makes their focus alter to the ad from the original content. Despite adults being able to keep focus on the precedent task even when new tasks pop up, kids are more likable to be sidetracked. This tendency can overall be detrimental and deleterious to kid’s development of focusing on things which is an indispensable skill necessary for their future lives.
To conclude, the issue of whether acceptability about targeting television ads on young children is complex. Some people have suggested that placing television ads toward children has no problems and should be allowed. Nevertheless, I still contend to the idea that targeting TV ads to children should be prohibited. Children should understand about economical concepts first and also, they should be protected in order to guarantee their psychological development.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 467, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rantee their psychological development.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, nevertheless, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, for instance, such as, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1753.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26426426426 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84683100818 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591591591592 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6654032354 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.5625 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8125 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4375 5.45110844103 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201170196883 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778869195805 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530622180894 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134926855355 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511269160045 0.0645574589148 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 467, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rantee their psychological development.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, nevertheless, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, for instance, such as, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1753.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26426426426 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84683100818 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591591591592 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6654032354 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.5625 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8125 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4375 5.45110844103 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201170196883 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778869195805 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530622180894 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134926855355 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511269160045 0.0645574589148 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.