Some people advocate targeting young children for TV commercials has no problems. However, in my opinion, I strongly disagree to them and believe that placing television ads for young kids should be disallowed. I will support my viewpoint why TV ads on young children can be injurious for the following two reasons.
First of all, young children in ages between two to five does not have a concept of economy such as, spending money on commercial goods or recognizing the reasonable price for certain products. Ignorance of such economic concepts brings about harmful burden for their parents. For example, there were many cases where children who were seduced by a mobile game ad and purchased in-app game items without understanding its prices. The problem is more severe because most of the times, children did not place it once but rather, placed it numerous times causing huge amount of money accumulated by small purchases. Thus, setting a bar in order to prevent children from falling into such entices is important.
Secondly, children being in a stage under development mentally, should be protected by not disturbing their focus. For instance, young children tend to watch contents for kids like animations regarding education or toys. While they are focusing on a certain episode, exhibiting an ad in the middle can be distracting which makes their focus alter to the ad from the original content. Despite adults being able to keep focus on the precedent task even when new tasks pop up, kids are more likable to be sidetracked. This tendency can overall be detrimental and deleterious to kid’s development of focusing on things which is an indispensable skill, necessary for their future lives. This is especially important because, kid’s brains are developing and if they miss this period it is harder for them to acquire such skills at later time of their life. To obviate such from happening, tv ads towards children should be limited.
To conclude, the issue of whether acceptability about targeting television ads on young children is complex. Some people have suggested that placing television ads toward children has no problems and should be allowed. Nevertheless, I still contend to the idea that targeting TV ads to children should be prohibited. Children should understand about economical concepts first and also, they should be protected in order to guarantee their psychological development.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 467, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rantee their psychological development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, thus, while, for example, for instance, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2036.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20716112532 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79722681631 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572890025575 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5972391472 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.157894737 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5789473684 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.47368421053 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196462968547 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0742064702937 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545230200462 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13845710096 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0476511545377 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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