The economical market in today's world is widely dominated with products that aim at young children.As most of them may claim to be useful , a lot of these products often fail to do so. Some people may claim that , these advertisements have proven to be useful for them. Whereas , others may argue that , even though the advertisements seem to be appealing, they are often misleading and should not be allowed to be shown on television.I am in agreement to the latter part of this argument and would not want such advertisements to telecast.
Firstly, the manufacturing company that runs TV Ads, often neglect the quality of products while improving their quantity. In short they prefer quantity over quality. As a result, parents unknowingly put the younger ones at risk because it is difficult to know where the product came from. For example, when i was a kid , i used to love playing with toy cars. The bright red, yellow, green colors used to amaze me and attract my attention. In fact, whenever a Toy car commercial used to come on the TV, i would urge mhy mother to buy them for me. But later on, I started to develop stomach aches and fell ill. This was because the toy car paint contained lead which I had ingested causing a serious risk to my health. Thus, such advertisements should not be allowed because they may sell products that may harm the health.
Also, majority of the Advertisements promote eatables like chocolates. It has been observed that dental health of young children are mostly affected, if such products are consumed excessively. For instance, my uncle runs a chocolate shop, where he keeps all the branded chocolates like cadbury, dairymilk. Many children in my locality usually like buying chocolates from him because of the chocolate ads on television. All of them have caries in their teeth! Even on advising them not to eat chocolates they still eat them because of the appealing ads. Since, dental health is a crucial aspect of a child's health, such ads should be discouraged.
Advertisements may show appealing offers and products but the target group of these ads should also be taken into consideration. Since many of these ads are misleading , the quality of some products will be harmful to younger age group and excessively eating chocolates just because the ads are promoting them, will add up to the risk. Thus due to these reasons i feel that TV ads for young children should not be allowed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, so, still, thus, whereas, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in fact, in short, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2022.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82577565632 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73486878413 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536992840095 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5935293829 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.2857142857 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9523809524 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38095238095 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154118882897 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0492490419817 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515501343777 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105084719362 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492689147218 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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