The author of the reading passage is of the opinion that even though the communal online encyclopedias are similar to traditional printed encyclopedias they are not that accurate. The online encyclopedia may offer variety of articles and information but it has a lot of problems associated with it.In contrast, the lecturer believes that, the communal online encyclopedias cannot be perfect but it has a lot of benefits over the traditional encyclopedia.
Firstly, the passage states that, anyone, from untrained personnel to unqualified people, can make changes to articles online. But the traditional encyclopedia is written by trained professionals.The lecturer counters this, by pointing out a fact that, errors in the traditional encyclopedias tend to remain unchecked for years and there is nothing one can do about it. The information is permanent and will remains so.The online encyclopedias, on the other hand, can be corrected by and is flexible and it offers a wide range of flexibility.
Secondly,the passage argues that, online encyclopedia aren't that secure, as hackers can easily tamper with information and they may even delete or change the facts. Whereas, traditional encyclopedias are relatively safe. The lecturer refutes this argument by stating that, online encyclopedias have seen growth in its form of security and has made changes. Read only format has been added to prevent hackers from accessing the information.He further states that, older people have been kept in-charge, to keep an eye on the articles and report any changes made to it.
Finally,the passage posits that communal encyclopedias give unnecessary importance to trivial facts than the traditional encyclopedia.It relates the historical article being as long as an entire TV series.It also says that, traditional media is more segregated and proportionate in comparison.The lecturer, however, is of a different opinion.He states that the online encyclopedia provides a vast space for including articles when compared to traditional one which includes limited space and unimportant information, that the user might find useless.The lecturer further mentions that the articles are diverse with clarity and accuracy.
To sum up, the lecturer feels that online encyclopedia is better than traditional encyclopedia as is provides accurate, secure and diverse information which can be updated from time to time. Thus, he contradicts the given passage.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, whereas, in contrast, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.4613686534 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 7.30242825607 219% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 22.412803532 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 30.3222958057 132% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2080.0 1373.03311258 151% => OK
No of words: 370.0 270.72406181 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.62162162162 5.08290768461 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20987792436 2.5805825403 124% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 145.348785872 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543243243243 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 419.366225166 162% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.55342163355 116% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.23620309051 170% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 21.2450331126 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 146.24855175 49.2860985944 297% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 173.333333333 110.228320801 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8333333333 21.698381199 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06452816374 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 4.19205298013 358% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254618559683 0.272083759551 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110136942567 0.0996497079465 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785973312003 0.0662205650399 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167404864767 0.162205337803 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0679780140995 0.0443174109184 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.5 13.3589403974 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 24.11 53.8541721854 45% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 5.55761589404 234% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.4 11.0289183223 158% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.91 12.2367328918 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.42419426049 113% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 63.6247240618 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 10.7273730684 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.498013245 133% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.2008830022 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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