Nowadays, Tv advertising has become a huge problem for everyone. I understand that advertising company has to do that to increase their business however its should be restricted and well regulated. Because it influenced a lot to our kids especially for the kids who are 2-5 years old.
To begin with, a child 's brain is very immature for critical thinking, in other words, they can not decide what is wrong or what is write. When they show any advertisement it affects them a lot and in fact for a long time. I can recall one of my cousins incident. When he was 4 years old, he used to watch a very famous tv series "picnic antrakshari" ( a Bollywood tv series). While watching this series, he saw an advertisement that it will drink fanta, it will make him kind of superman. after that, he started demanding for that drink. I know that this kind of soft drink is very unhealthy but it was very difficult to make him understand. Besides this, it was dangerous information for kids that he can be a superman after drinking this. Morever, I and my family members put a lot effort to make him believe that this information is wrong as well as dangerous Hence I believe that advertising company should make a few rules and regulation to restrict such kind of ads.
Furthermore, there is a lot of adult advertisement which we do not want our small kids to watch it. for example condom ad and many more. I remember off of such an incident, one of my friend visited my house with her 2 years old son. His son was very curious which is good but when he started asking questions about condoms, we got shocked and after that incident, my friend stopped watching the series in front of his son. Here I just wanted to convey this message that an advertising company should ban such kind of ads in between family series. Because everyone knows that family series is been watched by kids too.
In conclusion, I would strongly say that TV advertisement should have regulation for the ads specially in family tv series as well as goverment should also restrict some of their ads which gives false information.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...tv series 'picnic antrakshari' a Bollywood tv series. While watching th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, well, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, as well as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1735.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60212201592 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71680975384 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51724137931 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9728932929 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3157894737 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8421052632 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.63157894737 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0813187853769 0.236089414692 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0286643094008 0.076458572812 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0287030284384 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.060209727482 0.150856017488 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0159215740533 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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