Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Television advertising directed towards young children aged two to five should not be allowed Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Television is an important part of our modern life. The importance of television is undeniable from small to large sphere in our daily lives. The advertising companies are often using this strong and powerful media to reach every corner of our world. The advertising on television that has directed towards young children is problematic. I am pretty sure someone would agree with the given prompt. But, in my view is rather different because of the following two important explicit reasons.

The main reason is that, the younger children in their age are motivated and influenced by television advertising the most -ultimately it helps to shape the better future. There are many types of advertising are available to promote and engraved the positivity and shape the good individuality. Children on their age especially 2 to 5 years are love to mimic. They loves to follow what they are used to see. For example, in my childhood time, we were watching television regularly. When I was five, I saw an advertisement on the hundred influential people in the world. On that advertisement, I saw how much hardship and stress the successful individuals were used to bear on their earlier lives. That lesson engraved on my mind and it motivated me to become someone like them. Later in my life, I used to follow that lesson during I was going to lose my temper and passion. By practicing that learning I am now able to myself on high tier business society. If iI would not able to saw that advertisement my career and position might not have been the same as I am now. As you can see, motivation in earlier life by simply saw an advertisement would able to make an influential impact in our whole life.

Another reason is that, it is possible to inculpate children on possible hygiene and health conscious. We know health is wealth and the practicing of our health is begun of our very early live. As it is not a rush and go things rather it depends on long time practice. We know by implementing a tv series on that issue television can taught our children how to keep themselves save from germs. For instance, a study have been published by New York Times on that television advertisement influences on children. In this study two groups of children were selected, one group are used to see television and another group are not see the television. After one month, it was found the group who were not watching television got disease more than the earlier group. This experience taught me that, by watching television children can keep themselves safe from ailments.

In sum, television advertisement impacts on children is huge and it is hard to deny their influences. This not only, motivated the children to become a successful individual but also teach them how to keep themselves safe from harmful microbes. So, we should encourage our children to see more television advertisement on that issue to shape a better and reliable future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 252, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...dia to reach every corner of our world. The advertising on television that has dire...
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Line 3, column 366, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'They' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'love'
Suggestion: love
...ly 2 to 5 years are love to mimic. They loves to follow what they are used to see. Fo...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 396, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[5]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to seeing'.
Suggestion: used to seeing
...mic. They loves to follow what they are used to see. For example, in my childhood time, we ...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, for example, for instance, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2440.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 505.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83168316832 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83178286884 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473267326733 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 777.6 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.203608273 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.1379310345 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4137931034 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.93103448276 5.45110844103 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218748311076 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061040853209 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589104349844 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140129611151 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314278553632 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.89 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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