do you agree or disagree with the following statement? television and movies have more negative effects than positive on young people behave.
It is established beyond any doubt that television become one of the major parts of the contemporary human and has a crucial influence on people's behavior. Some people believe that televison has a considerable negative effects on young people behaviors. While othres don't think so. As far as i'm concerned, television in generic, has a lot of neggative aspect. I will explore my reasons in the susequnts paragraphs.
To begin with, one should take into eccount the fact that the television programs have some dstroctive effects on young people especially on teenagers. Young people are looking for a idol in their life and they may use television and cinema charactores as a hero in their life and if that hero or charactor is a improper person, they will be affected improperly. My notion on this issue has been profoundly influenced by my personal experience. When I was a teenager, I liked Joker so much. As a result I strived to become a person like him who was a bad person and have a negative role in the movie. For example in a era I was trying to make some picture on my face and go to the city to terrified people. Had I never got femiliared with this movie, I would not behaved like him.
Second remarkable reason is that television make young people lazy and prevent them to doing effective work in their life. Young people are experiencing a vital era in their life and they should try their best to obtain useful experiences. They can enrol in a language class or go to the gym rather than spending their time on televison. Honestly, spending time on television is a kind of wasting time. My brother is a compelling example and demonstrates this fact well. He is so interestted in TV serioses so he probably spend a profuse amount of his time on watching TV. He is so fat and because of his addective to television he not only don't able to attend in a sport class to loose his weight but also he loose his confidence because of his weight. Television has destroyed his life completely and if he were abled to control his time on TV, he would able to make a more lucartive life for hisself.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that televisio has an abondunt number of negative effects on young people's life. Becasue it makes them lazy and prevents them to do useful tasks in their life. In addition, many teenagers try to become like some appealing character of television or cinema that can make them a inaproppriate person.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 220, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...t televison has a considerable negative effects on young people behaviors. While othres...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 268, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...on young people behaviors. While othres dont think so. As far as im concerned, telev...
^^^^
Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...teenagers. Young people are looking for a idol in their life and they may use tel...
^
Line 3, column 311, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...r life and if that hero or charactor is a improper person, they will be affected ...
^
Line 3, column 617, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ative role in the movie. For example in a era I was trying to make some picture o...
^
Line 3, column 764, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'behave'
Suggestion: behave
...femiliared with this movie, I would not behaved like him. Second remarkable reason is...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 523, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'spends'.
Suggestion: spends
...terestted in TV serioses so he probably spend a profuse amount of his time on watchin...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 642, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...his addective to television he not only dont able to attend in a sport class to loos...
^^^^
Line 5, column 682, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...dont able to attend in a sport class to loose his weight but also he loose his confid...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 711, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...t class to loose his weight but also he loose his confidence because of his weight. T...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 310, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...television or cinema that can make them a inaproppriate person.
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, honestly, if, look, may, second, so, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2007.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61379310345 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7320908209 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501149425287 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4710863646 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2608695652 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9130434783 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95652173913 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187208356224 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0565314361502 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658011428056 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12385031179 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220584399555 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.