Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
As the technology is growing rapidly advanced, Many things related to it have definitely been improved throughout the period as well. They have greatly influenced in every part of our lives whether it be, working, finance or relationship etc. However, there has been an argument about using a television. Some people believe that it can ruin communications among friends and family. But I personally disagree with that point because It doesn’t destroy anyone’s life but It depends on how they use it which I will illustrate in this essay.
First and foremost, Watching a television can be another effective way of making one’s relationship. Because of Its convenience and modern. People can invite their friends or their beloved ones to watch it together. Nowadays It’s been upgraded much better than the past like widening the screen, Internet connection etc. which It’s literally called smart television. So, They don’t have to waste money for filling car fuel to go to a theater if It is really far from their home. Anyways, It will give a sense of watching a movie in a real theater and They can independently choose their favorite movies to watch. Apart from that, you can also recommend some movies If you have your favorite movies that you want your friends to watch. As a result, They can develop their connections by talking about those movies.
Moreover, It also gives you a wide range of communities. Because It has many types of the channel which means that it provides with many kinds of information. Therefore you are able to select which one is what you want to know. Consequently, when you have your interest, It will probably lead you to a group of people which have something in common. Finally, It will become a community. So you can share what you have known with your friends there. And then you will get to know others may be a stranger. So, It is a good chance to extend your connections with others. For example, When I was young, While I was watching a television at that time the card game competition commercial appeared on the screen. Normally I love playing it with others and I want to practice it by fighting with new people with the hope for meeting strong rivals. So I decided to participate in that competition. Eventually, I almost got the gold medal but I lost to the one who was better than me. Anyways I didn’t feel any sorrowful and upset at all because I got many friends from there and they were friendly to me.
To sum up, I disagree with the point that television breaks the communication between friend and family for the reasons that watching television can make a bond with others or your beloved ones and It could give you more connections and relationship with others.
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...any sorrowful and upset at all because I got many friends from there and they wer...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, then, therefore, well, while, apart from, for example, talking about, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2288.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 475.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81684210526 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73669959143 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517894736842 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 713.7 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.7818837036 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.7142857143 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9642857143 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46428571429 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214775643117 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538314501183 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662197902341 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155139788751 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0679838491583 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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