TOEFL TPO 02 - Integrated Writing Task
The passage and lecturer are about working as a team in many organizations. The passage gives some of the advantages of working in a group. While the lecturer illustrates the opposite sides of the passage’s views by working on the project in a group of members in the company.
Firstly, The primary benefit that the author of the passage brings about is by having a variety of knowledge, skills or even expertise could finish all of the assigned tasks much faster. On the other hand, The lecturer disagreed with this one by claiming that the members within a group might have opposite attitudes toward the project which caused the delay in reaching consensus.
Secondly, The author of the passage put forward the second advantage which was coming up with some creative solutions which made by risky decisions. So when the decisions went wrong, all members of a group would be responsible for these decisions. But the lecturer opposed that if the direction of the plan or decisions seemed not worked for the project. It would bring about the ignorance of members within a group and moreover when it came to failure, the blame dispersed to the whole group.
Finally, The author of the passage posits that many members felt that being a part of making decisions was much better than obliged task and furthermore, it would be a great opportunity to show their abilities to contribute them because the result was not only remembered but also significant. While the lecturer opposes this thought by saying that many members were given a free ride. Although, they didn’t much support their project and he added that if any members did a good job or gave more insights into the group, they wouldn’t be recognized by the whole group.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 95, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...n many organizations. The passage gives some of the advantages of working in a group. While...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 149, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
..., skills or even expertise could finish all of the assigned tasks much faster. On the othe...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 295, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t only remembered but also significant. While the lecturer opposes this thought by sa...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1449.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 296.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89527027027 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62772476762 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533783783784 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.2630508408 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.75 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.08333333333 5.45110844103 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0199022265699 0.236089414692 8% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00700626789204 0.076458572812 9% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0159112794488 0.0737576698707 22% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0136113024868 0.150856017488 9% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0141532083666 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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