Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
There are some moot points about television impacts on people communications. The question of whether television has destroyed relationship among friends or not has aroused as a subject of controversy among psychologists. When it comes to my position, by weighing up the pros and the cons, I strongly subscribe to the point that television has damaged the communication between friends and families. I have some reasons the most outstanding of which will be explicated in the ensuing paragraphs.
The first reason worth discussing here is that today due to various channels and programs on televisions, people are engaged with these kinds of program more than the previous time, therefore, the relationship among friends decreases dramatically. These programs fill their leisure time and they cut connecting with other people. As a case to the point, I vividly remember, when I was a primary student, I did not watch television very much because television had only one cartoon on Friday night. Thus I spent more time with my friends and families. On the contrary, nowadays my sister watches television very much. Owing to being some channels which only play cartoons, she spends more time watching television. This action diminishes her communication. My personal experience competently corroborates to the point that various programs on television lead to decrease connection between friends and families.
By the same token, another paramount reason to be mentioned here is that psychologically, television has an adverse impact on humans mind. Television secludes individuals and makes them alone. Everyone who watch television more than normal, he or she reluctant to communicate with friends and families and addicts to watching more and more. My personal example demonstrates this reality I have a friend who named Mahdi. He was a very communicative person and have many friends. Owing to one series on the television we do not have a relationship like earlier time. One day I saw him and he states that the prison break series lead that he could not be in touch with me. My personal example shed some light to the point that television gives rise to seclude on some persons.
To wrap it up, according to the aforementioned reasons, I reiterate that, television has ruined the communication between friends and families. This media not only decrease connection among buddies but also, seclude someone psychologically.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
...ision impacts on people communications. The question of whether television has destroyed relationship a...
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Line 2, column 498, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...n had only one cartoon on Friday night. Thus I spent more time with my friends and f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, so, therefore, thus, on the contrary, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2043.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27906976744 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05173319108 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537467700258 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.1730793782 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8636363636 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5909090909 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.31818181818 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199559910313 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610480411191 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387183896285 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133058915231 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287149643874 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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