Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television
has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use
specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
It is undeniable that televisions play an important role in our lives that each house has at least one. Nevertheless, I think that televisions do not give us any benefits in communicating with other people. This is because people prefer to watch TV than go out with friends and families and imitate what they see on TV which sometimes is violent. Thus, I hold with the idea that televisions have a bad effect on contacting with other people in our lives.
To begin with, it is obviously that televisions have many amazing channels for all people that attracts people’s attention. There are many cartoons or animated programs that children cannot stand stopping seeing them all day. They spend all their spare time watching TV instead doing other things like doing leisure activities, go shopping with friends and so on. Gradually, children cannot take their eyes out of the televisions which become addictions for them. Moreover, they spend few times contacting with friends and families which make them lose their communicate skills and sometimes damage many of their relationships with other people. My own experience as a child is a compelling example of this. When I was eight years old, I first watched TV and enjoyed it at the first time I watched. Many days after, I just spent hours sitting on the chair and seeing my favorite channel. Even my friends asked me for going out to play with them, I just rejected them and continued to watch TV. A months later, when I was so bored with watching TV, I started to find my friends for playing but they did not play with me. Therefore, I am sure that TV indirectly has a bad effect on our relationships with other people.
Secondly, people often mimic what they see on TV. People who spend much time watching TV tend to act the same on TV which sometimes is very harmful. This is because many people often watch action movies which are very attractive for many people. Characters in these films usually act like flying on the sky or fighting each other drastically which makes viewer thrill. However, the more people see these films, the more likely they act unusually like the characters in the channels. They will become more tempered and scream at other people without any reasons so they have less and less friends. For example, about two years ago, a students died because he jumped from his room on the third floor to the first floor. It was said that he imagined that he was a hero that flew on the sky which is a crazy activity in the real life. His parents said that before that day, he was very tempered and shouted at everyone even them, friends gradually left him. He spent so much time watching action channels that he might watch TV all day without doing anything else even eating. This is why I believe TV has destroyed communication among friends and families.
In conclusion, televisions make our relationships with other people worse in modern life. This is because people spend less time going out with other people and become more tempered and rude with their friends and families.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 994, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A month' or simply 'months'?
Suggestion: A month; Months
...ejected them and continued to watch TV. A months later, when I was so bored with watchin...
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Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun friends is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...thout any reasons so they have less and less friends. For example, about two years a...
^^^^
Line 3, column 631, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...ends. For example, about two years ago, a students died because he jumped from his room on...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thus, at least, for example, i think, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2526.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 534.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73033707865 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80712388197 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46273122734 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460674157303 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 751.5 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.7732574708 48.9658058833 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.2142857143 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0714285714 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53571428571 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137555412062 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459069519105 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488464086739 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106575276443 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0418583459593 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.